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| "The Past That Hunats Him" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Advice On: July 25, 2006 01:35 CDT
Comment/Review:
you really need to set things straight witht hsi story it's good and all but it just needs more spelling fixing like "soward" is actually spelt "Sword" i understand how you could have mistaked the spelling but please try harder to correct the grammar and spelling it would make your story so much better but i think you shouldnt mention shinta's name yet i beleive it's a little to early to be mentioning his name you should bring it as a shock to the group instead that would make your story so much better i like how you made kenshin seem like a nobel though it's nice not to follow the actual story line.
| Reviewed By: You'll never know On: January 02, 2006 12:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can see that you are striving for a good story about RK, but before you start writing anything, you should get your thoughts and ideas together in order to fit the story. Also, you desparately need help in grammar and spelling. That's what your computer should do. You need to spell check and grammar check your work and, if need be, read your work over after you write it. You won't gain many fans of your story if you keep writing the way you are.
| Reviewed By: Dlin [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2005 17:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
As far as I remember, Himura Kenshin's assassin name is Battosai, not Batosi. Japanese has a proper romaji spelling that should be used if you insist on using Japanese. Also, he probably doesn't remember his father and mother because they died of the cholera when he was still very young (check the OVAs for this, and even the manga, when there is the flashback about Yukishiro Tomoe). They were peasants, not nobles or anything of the kind. I suggest checking canon again before attemtping anything of the kind, because what you wrote has very little to do with fanfiction.
| Reviewed By: DarkAlchemist269 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2005 11:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW SIS Im usesing ur name
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