| "NOT TO BE LEFT ALONE" Reviews/Comments [ 20 ] |
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Reviewed By: InuHanyouRaeRae On: August 03, 2006 18:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked this story. It was original and very HOT. I've never read anything like it. Please don't be disapointed that I'm giving you a 6 in Spelling and Grammar. I just didn't like how you set up the words. But, you are a great author and should definitely write more hot lemons like this one.
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Reviewed By: Tetsuya yamatashi (not logged in) On: February 25, 2006 01:16 CST
Comment/Review:
Nice. Very hot. One problem that I noticed though. In the second chapter, you changed perspectives. You went from third person to more of a screen write, then jumped back and forth. Just another little hint in the grammatical section: In dialouge when someone adresses another person, there is always a comma before and after their name (Given, of course, that the sentance continues). IE 'InuYasha, Blah blah blah.' (actually, I'm pretty sure you did this for some of the sstory, then kind of abandoned it at some point) I hope I'm not coming off as pompous in any way... Anyways, yes, I loved the story. It was actually really cute. I have a strange sense of cute...
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Reviewed By: Sesshysgirl001 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2006 22:15 CST
Comment/Review:
this is very very. well i do not have the word so i am going to go with good.
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Reviewed By: cute_sesshy On: January 08, 2006 02:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you have probably the hottest sotries here. when are u gonna update it? will it be soon? hurry!!
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Title: Not To Be Left Alone
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2006 12:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: Ken's Girl On: January 04, 2006 13:00 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yahh! That was really good the lemon was nicein' hot too! ^^ anyway great job update if possible!
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Reviewed By: aznangelstarQT [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 20:12 CST
Comment/Review:
please keep updating or jus make annother story!! ja ne
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Title: NOT TO BE LEFT ALONE
Reviewed By: Lunar Ice Dancer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 16:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Why's he gonna punish her? What does he want to be called "Master" now or something?
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Reviewed By: Sam_Sama_Death [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 16:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah... that was not the best story I've ever read... You obviously don't reread your story when you write it. You should seriously consider doing some serious revisions it's heart-attack, not hard attach, do you have spell check? Oh, and one more thing, your story was very choppy, and the people were out of character. I'm not completely condemning you though, you did have a good idea, you just need some help. Can't finish it though, can't tollerate it any longer.
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Reviewed By: pitbull_koi305 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 16:27 CST
Comment/Review:
i liked it and i think u should write more...never knew kags like that stuff...thought she was a good innocent girl...anwz good job continue writing
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Reviewed By: Angel_of_Elements [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 12:06 CST
Comment/Review:
It's pretty good. I hope you'll add more to it!
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 10:30 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GREAT STORY!!!! I ENJOYED READING IT!!! GREAT DETAILS
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Reviewed By: lemonskittles [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2006 23:25 CST
Comment/Review:
It was good, I will admit that, but I have always pictured thier first time as a beautiful thing... Sorry if this is not the best I have read due to my opinion. It was good though!
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Title: Nice
Reviewed By: pamsonly [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2006 22:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your story was good. I enjoyed reading how inuyasha was able to handle Kagome for her outburts.
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Title: Nyce!
Reviewed By: InuGrrrl [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2006 17:48 CST
Comment/Review:
I liked it alot, the lemon was great fun too. I like how he manhandled her & the dialogue was hawt .
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