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Title: Good but...
Reviewed By: inukaglover815 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2010 02:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read this years ago and finding it again on a random sweep of my past reads, I decided I'd read it again. However, I could not get past the second paragraph. The plot seems somewhat original for the plotline you chose, however the grammar needs some work. You're probably like me in that your fiction gets better over time. But just because you have newer pieces to work on doesn't mean you shouldn't try to better the old ones. I would suggest having someone edit this for you or even just reading it through yourself. As I said before, I had to stop reading after the second paragraph because there were so many spelling/grammar mistakes that it was bordering on ridiculous. My memory of the story says the plot was good, but that will have to wait for another day. Please don't mistake this as me being rude. I feel this story could be pretty good if you simply took the time to edit it. All writers make mistakes....if they didn't we wouldn't need editors. I would also suggest reading the story out loud as this often helps you to see the places that need to be edited.
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Reviewed By: BowandArrow08 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2008 17:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really do not have one particular reason for rating it the way that i did. I do know, however, that it was very original and i really, really enjoyed reading it. (that may sound slightly kinky even though i didn't mean it to be. honest!) Anyways. I think that you should really continue writing. You have a knack for it. I am also interested in seeing your new upcoming one, the one where Inuyasha and Kouga's kids get together. However, the main fiction type i like is always Inu and Kag. It would be even better if you would write another one of those too. I swear, i am not COMMANDING you to write. Haha, that would be just lame. I can't MAKE you do anything. But, it was just a suggestion. I think your stories have promise, and your lemons certainly are one of a kind. Haha. I think you could go places, seriously. Just keep up the good work, and i will keep on the look out for any new fics that you find time to write! .:.:Arrow:.:.
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Title: hiya
Reviewed By: Evil-Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2007 14:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow wow wow that was HOT...you are amazing! you've got some talent girl! and this was your first fiction? pff...well, you can be proud of yourself...al you need to do is to work a bit on your grammar but once you've done that..I'm sure you'll be great..hell you're great already!! :P I hope to see more fictions coming from you! lovies EV
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Title: Not To Be Left Alone
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2006 17:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Title: Awesome
Reviewed By: Jdogg the ArchAngel On: August 19, 2006 13:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
it rocks but u need to work on the grammer and spelling and also the talking was good but it was alittle to much and inuyasha needs to stop calling her a bitch Note: Id like to see see one of inu and sango.
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Reviewed By: InuHanyouRaeRae On: August 03, 2006 18:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked this story. It was original and very HOT. I've never read anything like it. Please don't be disapointed that I'm giving you a 6 in Spelling and Grammar. I just didn't like how you set up the words. But, you are a great author and should definitely write more hot lemons like this one.
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Reviewed By: Tetsuya yamatashi (not logged in) On: February 25, 2006 01:16 CST
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Nice. Very hot. One problem that I noticed though. In the second chapter, you changed perspectives. You went from third person to more of a screen write, then jumped back and forth. Just another little hint in the grammatical section: In dialouge when someone adresses another person, there is always a comma before and after their name (Given, of course, that the sentance continues). IE 'InuYasha, Blah blah blah.' (actually, I'm pretty sure you did this for some of the sstory, then kind of abandoned it at some point) I hope I'm not coming off as pompous in any way... Anyways, yes, I loved the story. It was actually really cute. I have a strange sense of cute...
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Reviewed By: Sesshysgirl001 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2006 22:15 CST
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this is very very. well i do not have the word so i am going to go with good.
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Reviewed By: cute_sesshy On: January 08, 2006 02:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you have probably the hottest sotries here. when are u gonna update it? will it be soon? hurry!!
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Title: Not To Be Left Alone
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2006 12:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: Ken's Girl On: January 04, 2006 13:00 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yahh! That was really good the lemon was nicein' hot too! ^^ anyway great job update if possible!
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Reviewed By: aznangelstarQT [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 20:12 CST
Comment/Review:
please keep updating or jus make annother story!! ja ne
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Title: NOT TO BE LEFT ALONE
Reviewed By: Lunar Ice Dancer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 16:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Why's he gonna punish her? What does he want to be called "Master" now or something?
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Reviewed By: Sam_Sama_Death [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 16:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah... that was not the best story I've ever read... You obviously don't reread your story when you write it. You should seriously consider doing some serious revisions it's heart-attack, not hard attach, do you have spell check? Oh, and one more thing, your story was very choppy, and the people were out of character. I'm not completely condemning you though, you did have a good idea, you just need some help. Can't finish it though, can't tollerate it any longer.
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Reviewed By: pitbull_koi305 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 16:27 CST
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i liked it and i think u should write more...never knew kags like that stuff...thought she was a good innocent girl...anwz good job continue writing
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