| "its time to choose kagome" Reviews/Comments [ 39 ] |
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Reviewed By: hotshorty On: March 21, 2006 20:59 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
go hiei/kag!!great so far more please
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Reviewed By: Tsuki-tora (not logged in) On: March 12, 2006 01:20 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the story so far! I vote KurKag (Favorite pairing)YusKei and HieiKagura. Update asap! ^_~
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Reviewed By: gcdv [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2006 23:43 EST
Comment/Review:
pllzzz rite k/h!
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Title: that is so cool
Reviewed By: devils angel 115 On: March 11, 2006 21:05 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it is very cool and I want you to add more and it is fun to read you could add a charitar named angel
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Title: that is so cool
Reviewed By: devils angel 115 On: March 11, 2006 21:04 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it is very cool and I want you to add more and it is fun to read you could add a charitar named angel
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Reviewed By: Conspiracy Is Fun On: March 11, 2006 20:56 EST
Comment/Review:
Bashes head into desk You have a pretty good idea going here, but you need to work on your material. Your grammar needs work. Remember, capitalize the first letter in names, and it also helps to spell the names right. You use dialogue, which is good, but you have to make sure you start a new paragraph when someone new is talking. The chapters shouldn't be one big paragraph, as the last one is, since it's rather daunting for a reader to see. White space makes a person want to read it more since it lookes easier. It also makes your chapters seem longer. You might also get more reviews if you DID make longer chapters, at least two pages on Word in 12 Times New Roman. Give imagery, tell us about the setting, since settings are very key. These are very simple tips, and, if you need to, get a credible beta reader who can help you enforce them. Oh, and asking for at least ten reviews isn't very fair or realistic. MM.org has particularly stingy reviewers. I would really love to see this story progess, especially if it's Hiei/Kagome, and become successful.
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2006 20:17 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update ASAP!!!! GREAT STORY ^_^
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Title: time to choose kagome
Reviewed By: erin aka e On: February 13, 2006 19:59 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i loved it please update i really want to see what happens to hiei and kagome and also i think sota and ukina would make a perfect couple i love the hiei and kagome pair plese write more and maybe hiei dosent like kagome first and then inu tries to get keykio's sry cant spell soul and teies to kill kagome then hiei comes and saves her and they fall in love oh kagome has been haning out with the yu yu gang for a while and hung out with hiei alot so yeah please update thanks it rox - :p
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Reviewed By: prefect little girl (unlogged) On: February 08, 2006 16:30 EST
Comment/Review:
great story please update
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Reviewed By: darkenedsoul On: February 07, 2006 16:28 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's pretty good so far. i love Hiei/Kag pairings!!
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Reviewed By: neko_cat_kirara [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2006 22:16 EST
Comment/Review:
kag/hiei
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Title: It's Time to Choose Kagome
Reviewed By: PureMiko_Kagome69ner [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2006 15:52 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like your story, please continue to update. I know this is an YYH/IY story, so I want to vote for Hiei/Kagome pairing, if possible, PLEASE?!?!?!?!?!!!!!!! By The way, some of the spelling is wrong; Kikiyo is Kikyo (English) or Kikyou (Written in Japanese) kagra is Kagura
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 04:47 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh that is so messed up I want more please update soon.
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Reviewed By: dadada [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2006 14:30 EST
Comment/Review:
its pretty good keep up the work
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Reviewed By: dadada [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2006 14:29 EST
Comment/Review:
its pretty good keep up the work
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