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| "My Sephiroth" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Lilith667 On: June 11, 2006 17:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'd like to say right now that I'm not flaming you, but I do have a few suggestions for your fic, should you try to write another one. Your concept is good, but here are some things I noticed. First of all, you might want to go through and check your punctuation and use of tenses. They're a little off and make the fic a little difficult to read. Second of all, you OC is a Mary Sue. Try adding some small flaws to her to make her more human, and add more build up to her and Sephiroth falling in love. I've found that OC romance one shots are usually not successful because you have to give the readers a lot of time to adjust to and like your OC before they can support a relationship with a canon character. Google "Sephiroth/OC" and one of the first hits you get will be an explanation of Mary Sues in a Sephiroth/OC piece. Try taking out the Author's notes in the story and save them for the end. This is a good concept that can be improved upon. Like I said I'm not flaming you, this is just some advice from one reader to another.
| Title: What if?
Reviewed By: MHWND On: January 16, 2006 15:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ya got all your 10's. It raises an important queston in the Final Fantasy series: What if Sephiroth never died?
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