| "If I Die Tomorrow" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Title: kwool
Reviewed By: KawaiiKoneko89 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2006 23:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
update ^.^
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Title: O MY KAMI THAT WAS SO GREAT
Reviewed By: kags1 On: January 20, 2006 22:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY I LUV THE PLOT! WRITE MOEW PEEASE!?
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Reviewed By: cougiecat12 On: January 18, 2006 22:13 CST
Comment/Review:
neat idea for the war. How'd Hojo get involved?? The Battle sounded like you were playing risk. :), but still lots of nice detail. One thing instead of saying 'perfect moment' you should say 'on my command' or maybe 'at your discression'. Sounds more commanderish. Also- is Kagome alone when Inu shows up? Anyway that's it for now. liked the story so far.
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Title: o my kami that was great
Reviewed By: yasha_1-3 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2006 22:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
just luv it pls continue pls
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Reviewed By: cougiecat12 On: January 18, 2006 21:52 CST
Comment/Review:
I like the idea of the story.. but it seems a little bloody, extreme, and cliche. I know it's hard to write an inu fic without being cliche, but your summary is pretty origional it seems like such a shame that you start the story with something that's been done 100 times (except maybe with a 'jeffs' spin to it). I personally like Kikyou, and think she's over Inu, but that's another rant. The scene probably would have been better without Kagome showing up at all (and no tounge bitting). Kikyou can't talk without her toungue btw. So good story, but would have liked the scene better if you went straight to Inu telling Kikyou it's through. her going 'What!?! If she wasn't around you'd remember your love for me!' *Seals well* Inu going: 'what! no Kags for 8 years' *die* Or if you wanted to make the scene more dramatic you could have Kikyou push Kags through the well *flashy magic stuff* Inu Kills Kikyou. This would also give you an opportunity to make Kagome think he chose Kikyou (maybe Inu hesitates to kill Kikyou giving her the oportunity to push Kags?) Anyway. looking forward to the rest of your story. Hope I didn't offend you with this review. Decided to stop just reading w/o reviewing or just leaving 'story was great' reviews, so this is just my attempt at constructive crit.
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Reviewed By: kaira2828 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 20:57 CST
Comment/Review:
KEWL
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Reviewed By: Ariisha_Kurushimi On: January 13, 2006 16:36 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY I LUV THE PLOT! WRITE MOEW PEEASE!?
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