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Title: Suspense...
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2006 23:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was nice.... I did understand what was going on thoug...but you are still a good writter...cant wait 2 see Devan's response!
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Title: Good!
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: March 08, 2006 21:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was very nice! Devan and Eric got back together so good! And Derek....he...he needs to be hit by a bus...no then Devan would prob be sad and that would amek Eric sad so maybe he should just move away. No I have a better idea! He should stick his head in a food processer! That was a good chapter and like always keep it up!
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Title: WTF
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2006 22:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WTF happened? Who was "Der..." was it someone that I should know? And I'm guess his name is Derek? How could this happen?!?!?! HOW!!! But it was nice! Please update soon and when you do...kill that little loser! Kill him! Or do something!!! NOW!
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Title: ...
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2006 15:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*Cries* There is no more already up... I have to wait.... That makes me sad..... Oh well, i guess I can wait...but hurry! Oh and ideas: Hmm... what is this story rated? T So no one under 13 should read it? Ok... how about....hmmm...this is gonna sound sick but molestation by some other person? Jelous person? Or a random guy? Or if you wanna take it to the next level...rape..... If not..then Jelousy (I spelt it wrong, I know) if you dont wanna take it that far! Update soon!
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Title: LUVED IT
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2006 15:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was wonderful. Mainly the suryp scene; "Then I'll have to lick it up." That was so amazing!!! I LUVED IT! Write more! And I will ask you once more! I want another Original! PLease! I am pleading!!!!
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Title: *Cries*
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2006 15:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AHH! that was wonderful! I loved it! It was....amazing!!! Could you please, please please either add more then 12 chapters, make a sequel, or made another original stories like this? Please I am begging you! Or....I might have to...kidnap you and force you at a computer! MWAHHAHAHA! On the critique side, I dont know if your going to add this, but you need some confict. Something like him cheating on Eric or something like that. I dont know but conflict would make this story perfect.
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Title: AWWW!
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2006 13:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was so sweet! i loved it so much! Keep on writting good stuff! Please and could u make another origional when you are done with this one or whatever you are working on? PLease?
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Title: *Dances*
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2006 13:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YES! A X-mas Chappie! The best in all romance stories! this was really nice, the X-mas thing is overused and I was hoing for something more origional but this was still great! Thanks fro reviewing my story and isnt it funny how alike our two main characters are? Keep it up!
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Title: Sry
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2006 12:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey sry I got a little held up with school work, part time job and all that. This was a nice refreshing chapter, nothing bad about it, nothing extremly good about it. It was fun to read and wasnt boring but could be longer. Keep it up! You know I luv 2 read your stories!
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Title: Cries
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2006 22:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
OK so that was really nice and great. No character evolution though but still, I liked it! U got a 8 for one reason: The whole confession scene has been used over and over and is lsightly cliche. But, u jazzed it up so you win the prize on nothing! Please update soon, k? DOnt give up!
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Title: NO!!
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2006 22:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chappie *runs around happy*. But no! You said "I have alot more chapters" And im looking at the chapter list and there is only one more! What is that about!? Please dont stop beacuse u dont have any reviews cuz I reviewed ur story! every chapter!!! And I luv it! i didnt know this site existed before so I couldnt have reveiwed! Dont punish me like that! Now that u see I have reviewed and am reviewing please update more on this story! Ok im done, but please update! For me your loyal reviewer!
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Title: *Nods*
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2006 21:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was your best chapter yet and for that this review is going to be short. This is awesome and I lvoe this story. Your character deveopment didnt improve much, but your story plot went through the roof. Keep it up ad dont get down beacuse you dont have reviews, besides, you have me *smiles*
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Title: Paper-Warrior Loged in
Reviewed By: Paper-Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2006 21:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a very nice chapter. It wasnt to long and it was fun to read. i didnt get much known about Devan though....kinda 2-d 2 me but still a good chapter. The scene was nicely done and everything flowed very well. The only thing i would say that was a little bad was the whole lunch room scene was kinda like "I was up till 2:00AM and couldnt think of anything else" But I still loved it! I know you have completed this fic, but could u rite more origional fics, plz? I really like it Just do more character development and this story would be a A story!
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Title: AGAIN!
Reviewed By: Paper-Warrior On: February 26, 2006 16:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmm This is getting 2 be very interesting... I like this fic, but..... your characters ares till borderling 3-d/2-d. It was lard to imagine Devon and I felt like April had a gun to her head and u were holding it. It seemed over done and a little 2....childish. I dont know if the HI and DI etc stuff was made up but you explained it very well excpet; what the heck is HI and DI?!?!? Maybe I skipped over it but still, could u tell me? My screename is Paper-Knight (to lazy 2 log in). Stil a good fic, but I now you can do better. update me when you write more fics, k?
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Title: Hmmm
Reviewed By: Paper-Warrior On: February 26, 2006 13:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi ya! This is a pretty good fan fic for not being based on anything in general. Pros: This story is adverage length, which means I dont have 2 read for 4 thousand hours trying 2 get one chapter done. It has a good plot and the characters seem three-d not just words on a paper. Cons: You really need to describe more. Though they were 3-d I really didnt get the feel that they were actually there. It was hard to picture them. They seem not to really have a style of anything. If you lined up them and other common anime characters, i would not be able to pick them out. Give them flauws, slogans, a style of clothing or something like a tatto like Gaara from Naruto; something to distinguish them. Thanks about it. Going on to chapter 2 now and I'll keep on reviewing! See ya!
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