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Title: Arrgh! Spelling please!
Reviewed By: spellingfreak On: August 18, 2006 23:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
How many times have I come upon a fanfic with the wrong form of the verb "drag". When you wrote "The women drug their mates inside, pushing them toward a long row of tables." it should be: the women dragged their mates... Not Drug. That is not the correct form of verb. Drug means medicine, or that powdery white thing that makes you high. It frustrates me when people make this mistake.
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Title: Arrgh! Spelling please!
Reviewed By: No one On: August 18, 2006 23:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
How many times have I come upon a fanfic with the wrong form of the verb "drag". When you wrote "The women drug their mates inside, pushing them toward a long row of tables." it should be: the women dragged their mates... Not Drug. That is not the correct form of verb. Drug means medicine, or that powdery white thing that makes you high. It frustrates me when people make this mistake.
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Reviewed By: hellcat805 On: July 25, 2006 00:13 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
sorry, that i have not updated in a while. been busy with college. you really should have more reviews for this story. i did not know that i was holding my breath when i read that chapter. can't wait for the next update.
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Reviewed By: hellcat805 On: May 22, 2006 23:14 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, that was awsome especially the energy kiss. I loved it! ^_^ Can't wait for the next update.
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Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2006 10:29 CDT
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That was a good chapter. Especially when Hiei revealed the Black Dragon to them. I was wondering if he was going to do that anytime soon. I have a question though. Did you get the idea of energy being transferred through a kiss from Her Magities Dog? It's a manga I read and the leading lady feeds the leading man with energy through a kiss. It's just a thought, but I guess it's a common concept. Oh well. I patiently await your next update. ~Number One Fan~
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Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2006 19:04 CDT
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Where's my, "We decided to have a little girl right now."? I wish you'd let Hiei surprise Kurama by having a little girl right under his... well he would notice like a day or two after conception, but still. Aw well. It's still a great chapter except for the end. It's sad. You pulled a little to hard on my heart strings. But it was still kinda cute when you imagine Toushi's itty bitty hand latching onto to Hiei's not so tiny hand. It reminds me of when a friend's newborn brother grabbed my hand and wouldn't let go. It's so cute! Make me smile with some hot yaoi-ness next chapter please! ~Number One Fangirl~
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Reviewed By: hellcat805 On: April 27, 2006 21:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yay, everything is ok with Hiei and Kaihei ^_^
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Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2006 07:31 CDT
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... OMG!!! HIEI SCARES ME!!! I didn't think he would blow up that bad over it. I mean I do it to my family sometimes we they start gay-bashing, but man, Hiei, I almost wet my pants. (Joking, I'm just joking!) Anyways, I wonder who could possibly be the one behind all the pranks. I think it might be Kaihei or even Toushi. But that's just my input on it. Though you would know, you wrote it. Well I enjoyed reading this chapter and I hope you get Hiei pregnant with a little girl sometime soon. I won't wait forever ya know. Great chapter! Update soon! ~Number One FanGirl~
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Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2006 13:28 CDT
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NO!! HOW DARE YOU STOP BEFORE THE GOING GET'S...well...GOING?!?! Just kidding, I can't remember if I reviewed for the last chapter or not, but I will anyway. I loved it because Hiei and Kurama grossed out Kuwabara pretty easily. I thought something like that would happen. Anyways, this chapter. It was really good and it's keeping me interested in your story, although I seriously doubt I would ever lose interest in any of your stories. I just have one last thing to say. You better make Kurama be on top that way Hiei can get pregnant and have a little girl, just like they've always wanted. If that doesn't happen soon.... I swear.... I'LL FLASH YOU MY LITTLE BREASTES AND CRY AS LOUD AS I CAN!!!! Great chapter though! ~Number One fan~
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Reviewed By: hellcat805 On: April 11, 2006 22:04 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
noooooo! why did you have to stop it at the good part? *pout*
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Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2006 12:09 CST
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Yay! Wonderful update as always! I like this chapter the most. Although it is pretty hard to imagine Hiei having fun and playing with kids. I can't wait till they have another one. It'll make me smile if it's very soon. I anxiously await you next update. From your number-one fan!
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Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: March 21, 2006 09:16 CST
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Aiya! *fangirl squeel* I'm so glad you updated, and so soon! It's makes me smile the way you write. You always manage to bring the right emotions out of me. I wish you were able to publish this series and become a well known writer. I would buy all of your books and then some! I can't wait for the next chapter. Oh! I almost forgot. Is there a specific reason why Pan and Trunks marks are on their right side and Hiei and Kurama's are on their left?
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Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2006 21:19 CST
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OMG! I lurve this story so much!!! I'm so glad you updated! It makes me dance in my pants. I dance I dance I dance... anyways... I wonder, will Hiei have a little baby girl in this story? I think that would be really freakin hot if he did. Don't you agree? I feel bad that I'm the only one reviewing your story. Don't worry, I'll attempt to get some traffic your way. I've got connections and I could probably force *cough cough* er convince so people to read and review this wonderful crossover. Update soon my little fanfic slave minion thingy!
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Title: WOW
Reviewed By: Sakag [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2006 13:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHOOOHOOO!!! I can't wait until your next chapter comes out. I am sooooo liking this fic so far! Update soon please!
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Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2006 14:20 CST
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Um wow. Can I just say wow? I am actually dying to read your next chapter. This story seems like it will be great just like all your other ones. I'd say it would be, but I don't care for DBZ, but you might change me from my stubborn ways. Great chapter and story, update now if ya know what's good for ya!
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