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| "Shinji's Decision" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: ss69gogeta98 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2002 10:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am loving this so far i just got done reading up to chapt 4 but i must admit so far i am really enjoying this fic, I think you did a good job in keeping the lines in character! I will make another review when i am done reading it!
Great Work!! | Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2002 16:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a review done after re-reading thi story since i first saw it on FFN.
I see the places you tried to change things so as not to keep repeating the same things over again, and that's an improvement, but this story is sill a bit too wordy. Most stories suffer from too little background text, this is the opposite. Thought the places where each character expresses their own thoughts, there simply is too much detail in the text which drags the ease of reading down. I had to skip several lines even paragraphs simply because there was too much detail given. Just make your point and move on. That's and the hesitancy of the syle of writing is this stories only negatives.
Oh, finally, let Shinji and Asuka express themselves more when their alone with each other.
You do have it right in tht they would exhibit their attraction to each other too publically.
nuffsaid, denniusd | Reviewed By: nagake On: April 05, 2002 15:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this fic has boggled the mind, I'm loving it and hope that chap.10 will be just as great as the first 9. i wish i could write like this! |
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