| "Kagome and Kikyo:Soul Switchers" Reviews/Comments [ 23 ] |
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2007 19:37 CDT
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WHAT!.....because you did that its almost like the story was pointless...heheh they did even make it seven days............and where did Sesshoumaru come from.....it was all tragica and all but I can help laugh a little about how it ended ........I would have to say this was a very interesting story to say the least...hehe.....Good Job...........Nyuka
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Title: Good story, bad ending
Reviewed By: twilightsoul [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2006 20:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your the plot was really good but I felt that the ending was weak. Perhaps you should try a sequel? Leaving everything like that to just be a dream wasn't a good ending, it was liking having your whole story mean nothing. Anyway, like I said the idea and plot was good but you should've ended stronger. Grammar was pretty good through out the story but your creativity was very strong with the exception of the soul switching idea. Your title was to obvious. It was an interesting story except for its conclusion. Your style isn't very unique but with work you have some potential. Good luck on your future works.
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Reviewed By: critical eye [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2006 11:15 CDT
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You really need to work hard over this story, I´ve never read such an idiotic ending like this. Can´t you see that all your work was nothing with a ending like this? And you actually had a really good idea with the switching and you didn´t make Kikyou evil like most authors do because they don´t like her. It would have been a good lesson for Kagome which would force her to move on. Really, who would want such a immature prick like Inuyasha who wants both of them? As if he is the only man in the world. Another problem is they are all OOC. Kikyou comes in Inuyashas heart first but he would never try to have sex with her. He is blushing while holding hands and they only kissed once before! Inu is still a boy and Kikyou is too pure (alive and dead) to have sex before marriage; why else would she want Inu human? Not because she hated him as a hanyou, that´s bullshit. She loved him regardless of what all Inu/Kag fans think; she wanted them equal, a normal human female and a normal human male. Furthermore you made Kagome a crybaby. I can count how often she really cried in the whole series (manga) on one hand; she is very emotional but not a crybaby. She is always sad and hurt when Inu leaves her for Kikyou but she dosen´t cry because of it. I would have voted for Inu and Kikyou because he doesn´t love Kagome enough or Kikyou more and both deserve more than just a part of him. Kagome has other man after her who are better than the puppy (Kouga is sometimes dense but a better choice than Inu and he really loves her). The last thing I wanted to say is that Kikyou´s body is made of clay; it is not possible to make sex. To be blunt, she would brake when Inu would try to stick his dick in her. Also she can´t bleed or produce other fluids, her body is filled with soil, ashes and bones. After Naraku has injured her she only lost her powers in the form of a purple mist. I hope you can take the time and improve this fic because the basic idea was original. Try not to rush and bring more details.
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Reviewed By: mishizzletran [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2006 00:20 CDT
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hahahha the ending was funny. i mean it sucked but it was funny.... you wrote all this drama and then all of a sudden, IT WAS A DREAM! lol. buhh good job anyways!
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Reviewed By: kagomestanton *not logged in* On: June 19, 2006 23:36 CDT
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well i really liked the story except for the last two chapters... the dream thing was a really lame ending to a really good story! it seeemed like you ran out of time and needed a fast ending...
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Title: oops
Reviewed By: The Midnight Priestess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2006 20:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
oops heh heh srry. somehow it accidently posted a bunch of my messages. srry again
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Title: kool
Reviewed By: The Midnight Priestess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2006 20:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think it's really good!I was going to add a flame at the end, before i read it was all a dream. lol it would suck if it wasn't. I think you should write a sequal!
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Title: kool
Reviewed By: The Midnight Priestess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2006 20:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think it's really good!I was going to add a flame at the end, before i read it was all a dream. lol it would suck if it wasn't. I think you should write a sequal!
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Title: kool
Reviewed By: The Midnight Priestess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2006 20:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think it's really good!I was going to add a flame at the end, before i read it was all a dream. lol it would suck if it wasn't. I think you should write a sequal!
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Title: kool
Reviewed By: The Midnight Priestess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2006 20:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think it's really good!I was going to add a flame at the end, before i read it was all a dream. lol it would suck if it wasn't. I think you should write a sequal!
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Title: kool
Reviewed By: The Midnight Priestess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2006 20:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think it's really good!I was going to add a flame at the end, before i read it was all a dream. lol it would suck if it wasn't. I think you should write a sequal!
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Reviewed By: surprised On: March 11, 2006 18:28 CST
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hmm... although i find the ending cliche with the whole dream thing.. I am glad that it didn't end with everyone dead. I think you should write a sequel to your story.
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Title: .........yay.......
Reviewed By: MADMAD YUP YUP!!!!^.^ On: March 10, 2006 17:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woah, i DID NOT expect that!!!! you NEED to have a SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!pwease? (sad face) grrrr please? (punches grill cheese sandwhich) alright, so im a little hyper right now, so? sequel! love it, and is this story on fanfiction.net? just wondering:)
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Reviewed By: BiggestInuyashaFANever [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2006 02:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
That ( no offense ) was a very mortifying Inuyasha/Kikyo/Kagome fic you killed everyone and then its a dream like come on thats just too cliche.
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Reviewed By: inuyasha _star [MediaMiner Member] On: March 08, 2006 01:32 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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when the next chapter up good story!!!!!!!!!!!
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