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| "Shades of Gray" Reviews/Comments [ 670 ] | | Pages (45): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] | Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2009 00:57 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WICKED is the best!!! I saw it in Melbourne, (Australia) for my friends birthday and the end of mid year exams! I was so upset when I heard the last song start... Fantastic Chapter! I was reading it threw out the day, during my lecture and tutorial... (NNNNOOOOOO I DON'T WANNA GO BACK!!! start of second term sucks!) you kept me wide awake during the boring repetitive things I heard (and will hear again in my next lecture)
| Reviewed By: inyu01 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2009 19:39 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I would like to state again AWSOME STORY...YOU ARE A GREAT AUTHOR...PLEASE CONTINUE DON'T LEAVE ME HAGING........
| Reviewed By: Kinky-Hoe [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2009 17:47 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
"We are losing both the Fukimori and the Higurashi families because of you and your brother's inability to keep it in your pants." Great Toga! Two thumbs-up for that line. It's just so true. It was also a great ending to this chapter, to have him completely alone in his office while he thought he still had to deal with Kagejiro (who is, by the way, amazing with his sarcasm). You've done a great work, again! I'm Maggy by the way. I'm just using my MM account, now that I have one. You're welcome, about the corrections :). When you'll be editing your chapters, just send me the French lines you might want me to check (I believe there's a PM thing here at MM? Oh, well, I still have the same pen name at FF.Net) and it will be done quickly, since I always check my emails/messages once a day. Oh and, if it can help with your editing... Inuyasha's mother's name is actually spelled Izayoi, not Izayio. You're not the only author who did the mistake, anyway. But hey, I think I'll stop talking about corrections and mistakes, because I feel like bitching around. ^^ I really, really want to see how Inuyasha will try to get Kagome back. At least he's through with Kikyo for good. And Sesshomaru (Sissy-maru, damn xD) seems to have it all figured out about his business, Rin and Kenren. But I'm sure you still have some drama planned... don't you? I can't wait for your next update! But so far, I'm satisfied with this one. See ya!
| Reviewed By: ninjagurl512 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2009 16:29 PDT
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wow. just wow. you go ahead and take all the time you need to write these chapters because they definitely don't disappoint. huzzah for sesshoumaru punching daddy. about frickin time. cannot wait until the next chapter, keep up the good work!
| Title: Chapter 35
Reviewed By: Drake Clawfang [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2009 15:30 PDT
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This chapter was interesting. I was indeed expecting physical confrontation. I do see now that Toga was a lot of the things he was said to be, but also he wasn't many of the same and was many things they didn't think he was...did I phrase that right? I'm glad he's letting his sons live their lives, such as it is, but am more concerned with him now. He really doesn't believe in happiness, but he's known it before. I wonder if he's really so far gone he doesn't realize how miserable he is...
| Reviewed By: inyu01 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2009 18:41 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWSOME FIRST 20 CHAPTERZ I LUVED IT!!!! I AM STILL READING THIS IS GETING SO GOOD.PLEASE FINISH AND CONTINUE WRITING!!!!!!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: Maggy On: July 04, 2009 17:27 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, hey! I finally finished reading all 34 chapters. This was just so good! Kagejiro is my hero. I'll be voting for him for the IYFG as best characterization. :) This story is really... flexible; the characters can really piss me off even if I love them. Miroku and Sango are quite the weird ones, I think; he's just so funny and she... Well, what's strange is that she has known Kagome all her life and yet the two of them don't seem to be able to think the same way. But having a pushy best friend just as Sango is sometimes, I can understand some of Kagome's reactions. My favorite chapter is the one in which they're all at the bar, before the drama kicks in again, and my favorite character is definitely Rin (though I like Inuyasha and Kagome's fetish, heh) ^^. Anyway, as I told you in a previous review, I found errors when reading french sentences. However, I didn't correct them because I don't want to be annoying with that; it's your story. If you ever want me to correct them, there's no problem, but if you don't, I won't mind. I hope you will update soon :).
| Title: Pointing out a mistake
Reviewed By: Maggy On: June 27, 2009 11:13 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey. I just started to read your story... And before I continue, until I give you my opinion about the whole fanfiction (well, even though it's not complete yet), I wanted to point out this sentence: "Fermez l'enfer, Miroku ! je vous tuerai si vous le gardez vers le haut!" Since I live in France, I just wanted to correct it for you, because the sentence is wrong; nobody will ever talk that way over here. So... The right sentence would be "Miroku, ferme-la, putain de merde ! Je te tue si tu continues !" There are no rude expressions using "Hell" in French. So, that's it :). I'm off reading next chapter! This story seems so interesting!
| Title: Pointing out a mistake
Reviewed By: Maggy On: June 27, 2009 11:13 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey. I just started to read your story... And before I continue, until I give you my opinion about the whole fanfiction (well, even though it's not complete yet), I wanted to point out this sentence: "Fermez l'enfer, Miroku ! je vous tuerai si vous le gardez vers le haut!" Since I live in France, I just wanted to correct it for you, because the sentence is wrong; nobody will ever talk that way over here. So... The right sentence would be "Miroku, ferme-la, putain de merde ! Je te tue si tu continues !" There are no rude expressions using "Hell" in French. So, that's it :). I'm off reading next chapter! This story seems so interesting!
| Reviewed By: beckyducky [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2009 06:28 PDT
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Well I have a lot to comment on but first: Holy crap! The prescription is made by Taisho industries?!!? Hah! That is hilarious! It was made with love by Inuyasha's father! So anyway - the actual review: the exchange between Kagome's father and Kagome was great. Just one question though - what's his name? And at the end, I was kind of confused. After Kagome yelled, "Why today? Why now? After all of these years, why did you wait to come see me? I hate you! I fucking hate you!" is her father still in the room? Or did he actually leave? And does Jakotsu make an appearance at the end? (He's the only person that I think would call Kagome "poodle.") I honestly can't wait until the talk with Inuyasha's father! It's going to be so tempestuous!!! Honestly, there's not much footage of Inupapa in the anime series, or the manga series, or the movies. I remember in Curse of the Dragon that he was kind of benevolent in many ways, trying to keep inu alive and all. But in Shades of Grey he's kind of…evil. The biggest conflict stems not really from Bankotsu, but from the fathers of each family. Bankotsu is like the side effect of every fucked up thing the fathers do. In many ways, I'm picking up a lot of Shakespeare in your fic (I LOVE IT!!!) It's like an awesome mix of Romeo and Juliet, A Midsummer Night's Dream, As You Like It, and even King Lear. But anyway: one criticism…I thought that Inuyasha kind of recovered quickly from Kagome finding out and telling him to fuck off. Wouldn't Inuyasha be at least a little bit worried about Kagome exposing him to certain people in an act of anger and impulse? When Jiro was pushing him to talk to their father, Inuyasha didn't want to talk to him understandably. But then, after Sesshoumaru shows up, Inuyasha magically changes his mind. While Inuyasha's problems might seem like cake compared to the problems of good ole Sesshiles, the change seems to be so abrupt. (Switching gears) Okay so while I was rereading, the thought of life expectancy suddenly occurred to me. Let's say Inu/Kag and Sess/Rin pull through in the end; Kag and Rin are humans…how are they going to survive for the same time as the Taisho brothers?? Final thought: I love Kagejiro!! Are you going to give him a girlfriend? Haha peace!
| Reviewed By: silveraliora [MediaMiner Member] On: May 05, 2009 09:14 PDT
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Great chapter. I loved the scene between Kagome and her father.
| Title: One eyed one horned flying purple people eaters
Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2009 07:04 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ooh, I needed a break from the agunst party of the previous chapter so I waited to read this one until now. Sheesh its like a sh!t storm that just wont quit. Good golly gee gosh I sure do hope the sun comes out soon, everyone deserves a little happiness. But I get the feeling your not done with them yet.
| Reviewed By: Lucykriest [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2009 01:27 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok so I totally never really get to be online, but when i do i seriously look up this story. I even forgot my old account password. XD so yeah, i just thought I'd let you know this is awesome. I also enjoyed curse of the dragon. so please, hurry and post a new chapter before i move again and have no internet XD
| Title: ch. 34
Reviewed By: leilachan ~nsi~ On: April 21, 2009 11:28 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i find it amazing that sess actually went to 'amend' things with rin. wow, he really had to swallow some pride to do that! and rin's reaction, she truly has MASSIVE balls. but then, being with him, you'd have to. i'm glad tho, that he went to her to 'apologize'... in his way. i knew he would melt when he saw kenren. his heart is only 7/8ths stone. lol. now as for the (i would say 3 stooges, but may risk eminent messy death) three bros heading to see papa-san. man, is it gonna be a blood bath? i'm worried, but i guess i should trust you instead. it makes things easier on the stomach. ^_^ hopefully you will feel better soon. it sux to be sick. and i know the last thing you wanna do is type, so just know that your new update is very very appreciated. and i almost forgot... kags dad can go get #@!*ed. what a lousy excuse for a father!! grrrrr!
| Reviewed By: ninjagurl512 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2009 20:53 PDT
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Amazing chapter. I like how we have these "calm" chapters in between the "oh shit" chapters. Good balance. Keep up the good work hun, can't wait for the next update!
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