Title: FFRG review chapter 1
Reviewed By: Sari-15 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2006 20:35 CST
Comment/Review:
Thanks for submitting to FFRG. I will be honest, I haven't finished the entire series yet--having only read through volume three. I don't know how much they go into the magic kingdom, but I really enjoyed some of your portrayal of it. All I can say is detail please. I didn't get a very strong picture in my head of the places that were being presented, or the world in which I was being introduced. The story does have an excellent start and I think just showing things a little more through the characters eyes instead of just having them tell us could help bring the story to life a little more. Very nice job and it's nice to see a submission from the UltraManiac fandom...it's the first that I have read since reading it myself. Thanks for submitting!
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