| "Nightmares" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: the bastard child On: May 18, 2006 19:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
damn... i really thought you were going to end it with almost everyone dying... interesting ending, what with kikyou and everything. not bad.
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Reviewed By: the bastard child On: May 18, 2006 19:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
much better. mayhaps the dialogue helped...? anyways, this chapter was a lot more detailed and flowy. good job.
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Reviewed By: the bastard child On: May 18, 2006 19:10 CDT
Comment/Review:
well... not to be harsh, cuz i know my own writing is far from perfect too, but you need more details. you tell when you should show. and the first chapter seemed VERY rushed.
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Title: Nightmares: Bitter sweet (Chapter 02)
Reviewed By: DemonicTenshi84 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2006 20:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think your story is very good, please update soon
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Title: Nightmares: Bitter sweet (Chapter 02)
Reviewed By: DemonicTenshi84 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2006 20:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think your story is very good, please continue and update soon
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