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| "Opal" Reviews/Comments [ 22 ] | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] | Title: Opal
Reviewed By: Lyana On: March 14, 2006 12:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Tens across the board!!! Congratulations! I can't wait for the next chapter!!
| Reviewed By: paniwi (can't be arsed to log in) On: March 12, 2006 03:54 CST
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well...you better not kill anyone off you know :p I just don't understand why humans declare war to the Kaitsunes? Didn't they think it was the kaitsune liberation front thingie? Or have they figured out it was someone else,if so, what are the consequences going to be for Ryou? ...yes, humans are assholes ^_^...
| Title: Opal
Reviewed By: IceAngel's Hikari On: March 06, 2006 13:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it so much it's so good I red it before on AFF.net wich I can't seem to find anywhere!!!!so if you now could you let me now at wolfsangel330@msn.com? anyway I love it and please update very soon!!
| Title: Wai!
Reviewed By: Nekosune! On: March 03, 2006 21:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely loved it! Yamyams, cookies, and pocky for you! Update soon for more yamyams!
| Reviewed By: paniwi (NLI) On: February 27, 2006 09:20 CST
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cute, but it's kind of the 'everyone's gay' syndrom hm? I have nothing against gay relationships (hell, why else would I be reading this) but not EVERYBODY is gay, I would like to see a straight couple floating around as well, even if just as a small side-character thing, it would just make everything alot more believable. I did enjoy the chapter alot, your writing style is engaging and amusing and Ryou's character never fails to amuse me. Poor Bakura, what a way to wake up, I had to laugh over that scene. Keep the good work up!
| Title: Awesome story
Reviewed By: TheBlackPanther [MediaMiner Member] On: February 20, 2006 22:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I simply love this fic. I like your style and ability to write the characters as themselves is your alternate universe. BTW are Jou and Seto going to show up? Keep up the good work TBP P.S. Please update soon!
| Reviewed By: paniwi (NLI) On: February 20, 2006 10:08 CST
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nice chapter, but being the bitch I am, I'm the first to scream TOO SOON! Falling in love is one thing, but people generally don't immediately start fucking without second thoughts, I take it it WAS Ryou's virginity that was taken. Don't get me wrong, the lemon was ok (though I missed some blow-job action and the likes, lol) its just too soon. Otherwise nice chapter, also with the council
| Title: Yet another review ^^
Reviewed By: azndr3amer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2006 21:26 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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WOW! I really really really really loved the lemon...one of the best ones I've read in a long time...wow...you have a great style of writing that kept me coming back, especially when I saw it had been updated ^^. Despite what the first reviewer said, I think that you focused on the more important parts and wrote them EXTREMELY well. I'd recommmend this to ANYONE. Love it very much, just had to say it again in a second review. ^^ -azndr3amer
| Title: Ahh, kirei..
Reviewed By: Cloaked Vampire [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2006 17:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ahh, so beautiful, as usual ^^; I just thought I'd give you another review XD Well done!!
| Reviewed By: Maya N On: February 15, 2006 22:51 CST
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i really love this story!! your doing such a great job!! i really cant wait for the next chapter!! please update soon!!!
| Reviewed By: azndr3amer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 18:08 CST
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WOW! At first I chose other fanfics over this because the summary didn't seem all that good, but now that I've read it, I really wish I'd gotten to it sooner ^^. It's a great, creative story! You put a lot of detail into things that matter...and if you make lemon scenes, I can't wait for those -.^ hehe. love your story and I hope you update soon!
| Reviewed By: sglily-nli On: February 13, 2006 19:29 CST
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What a nice surprise to see this story here while I am suffering from DT's since THE OTHER site is experiencing major problems... Nice chapter! I loved how Ryou woke up and decided to plaster his lips to a sleeping Bakura... delicious! I was rather surprised by Bakura's reaction. I thought you were teasing us... I thought maybe ole' Bakura would join Ryou in the shower... heh heh. But, that's OK. I liked that Bakura kissed his human before Ryou left on his mission. Seems like Ryou wanted more... The mission itself was interesting and gruesome. Good job, Ryou for pinning the crime on someone else... Looking forward to Ryou's return and the reaction from his new "family".
| Reviewed By: kuramaishotlikehell [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2006 03:06 CST
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Oh wow! Please keep updating!
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2006 07:15 CST
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yeey, an update! Nice chapter, poor Ryou, it seems that the counsil wants to get rid of him as quickly as possible. I would've liked to see some more training and maybe a portion of the meeting though.
| Title: nicely done
Reviewed By: paniwi (NLI, am I ever?) On: February 01, 2006 10:34 CST
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I just read the whole thing, and I'm really excited about it. You bring in a whole lot of inventive ideas, such as the bed, and how the ship looks, you deepen those things out where most writers wouldn't. Also, I find the personality's you've sketched really nice, especially Ryou's. Hooray for Ryou's who aren't made out of sugar and are sarcastic. The only negative thing I can think of is perhaps that you could try being a bit more in depth with your characters. For instance, Ryou could act, or think for that matter, a bit more traumatized about having seen a mass murder of those he knew/loved. When you let him cry about it, it seemed a bit distant, when reading a story, the reader should have the idea of being drawn in, and sharing emotions with the characters, not the feeling that they are just onlookers. Above advice is a bitch to achieve, I know all about it, but if you write more and put your heart in it, especially read alot of other books and fic's you'll see that in time you'll become better in it. All in all this is really good!
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