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Title: Oh So Sweet!
Reviewed By: Nikkie23534 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2006 00:48 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Next chapter please!^_^
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Reviewed By: mm-reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2006 16:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your story concept is original and normally I would enjoy it, but there are too many paragraphs devoted to name brands, personal hygiene habits, and clothing descriptions. I don't care about their bathing habits as long as I know they are clean. I don't care what brand underwear they have on. I don't care about which type of luggage they use. It waste's my time to read about it and it takes away from the real plot and the interaction between Kagome and Inuyasha. I think you would have more reviews if you devoted more time to the real story and less time to trivial and meaningless descriptions of the shoes Kagome is wearing. Please don't take this as a flame. Again, I think your story concept is very original and your writing style is good, however, it is irritating to read paragraph after paragraph about what they did in the bathroom while they took a shower. I am not the only one who thinks this, I'm sure, and when a reader gets bored with that stuff, they don't come back to read any more chapters. You do have some minor spelling problems too, but they are not that noticeable. I would like reading this story more if there was more interaction between Inu/Kag and less useless junk that does not move the plot along clogging up each chapter.
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Title: Ch.7
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2006 16:05 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another good chapter if I do say so myself, it was a tad short but no worries. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: DarkMoonStar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2006 23:08 CST
Comment/Review:
Love this story, such an interesting read. Well can't wait for more, update soon!
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Title: GinaCat
Reviewed By: GinaCat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2006 16:34 CST
Comment/Review:
I love it I can't wait to see what happens
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Title: ch.6
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2006 12:00 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The pace is very much to I/K relationship is very much to my liking. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: RavenShadow [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2006 09:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story. The slow growing relationship between InuYasha and Kagome is fun to watch. But I sense some conflict in the future with the introduction of Kouga in the next chapter. But all in all I really can't wait for your next update.
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Reviewed By: kagome313 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2006 04:30 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story is interesting!i like it alot, your great.pwease update a.s.a.p!
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Reviewed By: black_talisman13 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2006 11:28 CST
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I am really surprised that you haven't got more reviews for your story! The story is great and very interesting. there are some minor mistakes when it comes to the spelling, but it doesn't really disturb the story.
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Reviewed By: tachi_fossae [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 16:43 CST
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Great plot and wonderful characters. Needs proofreading though.
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Title: ch.5
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 09:07 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, you just keep impressing me with each new chapter. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Title: Chapter 4
Reviewed By: Babsie [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2006 21:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it. Specially the little chat that Kagome have with Kikyou ate the ladies room...But I was waiting for a good night kiss in the end of the chapter...Will they meet again? Please, update asap. You are doing a great story here. Congratulations
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Title: ch.4
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2006 11:42 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another fantastic chapter and I would like to thank you for the quick update. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Title: Chapter tree
Reviewed By: Babsie [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2006 19:42 CST
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Wow...i think that is a great story. You have an original plot here and very well writed. I´m dying to read about Kagome and Kikyou first encounter and how Inuyasha will react to all of it. So, update asap, please.
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Title: ch.3
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2006 11:34 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another chapter to add to the growing list of great ones. I really appreciate the quick updates and update when you have time please.
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