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Reviewed By: dela1 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2008 23:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this ending it was so wonderful
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Title: Chapter 2
Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2006 22:37 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Such horrid nightmares that give us glimpses into Inu's suffering. Sess waking up and 'on alert' was calming in that it reassures the reader that Sess is serious about protecting his new mate. At first I thought that Sess should not be bringing up Inu's painful memories, but I guess it is true that he needs to know the extent of the damage in order to plan out the most healthy way in which to respond to Inu. Inu's reaction brought a lump to my throat. You make us see the pleading in Inu's eyes and hear the whine in his throat. You make us feel his pain, fear, and need to flee. And Sess is enlightened and I'm sure that he feels a certain amount of guilt at having been so cold to Inu while Inu was suffering while at the same time seeking Sess's approval and love. That makes the whole tale even that more heart wrenching. The end distraction was beautiful.---I'm hoping that there will be another chapter. Would you please email me and let me know if you plan on writing another? sparkling_snowfall@hotmail.com Thanks, Snow
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Title: Chapter One
Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2006 22:29 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Again so bittersweet. Yes, I remember this one and hoping that you would add another chapter in which we see whether or not their father makes it back to discover that they have mated and what his reaction would be.--Aside from that, it was sad that Inu was made a present to Sess on Inu's b-day. But, it was inconsequential in the end. Inu trying to make Sess feel better and Sess's realization of this fact was sweet. Sess's declaration that he would kill their father was very noble and Inu's reaction very real. You use such picturesque words, such as 'raid the other's mouth' and 'crimson rivers'. I loved Sess's description of what the word 'beautiful' constitutes and Inu's response that Sesshoumaru was not beautiful and pausing before telling Sesshoumaru that he was indescribable. That was so lovely that it gave me butterflies. Your description of the successive rush of emotions displayed on Inu's face was fantastic in its detail. The lemon was done tasteful, exquisite, and with enough visuals to be complete. Oh! And fangs! The way you formatted that section demanded attention, brought out the significance of the act. This plan of Sesshoumaru's is very wise. Let's hope that it does not backfire on him. Their final words at the end of the chapter were once again, bittersweet. "Don't ever leave me" left my heart aching for Inu. He has no hope and has difficulty even accepting this act as something to have faith in. And Sess's response was very reassuring. Wonderful chapter. On to the next! Snow
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Reviewed By: YaKuSoKu-_-_-_- ChAn On: February 18, 2006 12:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i totally LOVE this! I've read the other prequels to this fanfic and I love them all! You are a totally genius!!!
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Title: fawn of the woods
Reviewed By: fawn of the woods [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2006 20:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
yo starting off i rarely do tens this fic does have an enjoyment to it i would like to hear the endind or continuation but what are you going to do about Iazoi when "papa" dies? inu-kun should help with this battle the two of them together could do what one could not for me you jump topic/emotions too quickly savor and describe the feeling of loss and warmth that will give the story more "juice" plz update!!
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