| "After the Lunar Flower" Reviews/Comments [ 37 ] |
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Reviewed By: bmk On: July 21, 2006 18:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it it was great cant wait for the next chapters
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Title: Moooore! ;-;
Reviewed By: Lilium On: April 02, 2006 12:33 CDT
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Please write more chapters! PLEEEEEASE!!?? ;-;
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Reviewed By: lawngnome05 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2006 14:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok i know everyone is saying that things are going too fast for kagome and kiba but personally i think you have to consider the fact that kiba is a WOLF. animal instincs and all that would have heated that kiss up no matter how close he was with cheza, he's an animal and a female advance would be hard for him to resist. i do agree that kagome should move a little slower but then she too would have a hard time, think about it here's a guy that she is acually attracted too (unlike kouga) who is declaring his dedication to her and wants her as well, not as a replacement. Because no matter how close kiba was with cheza i don't think he could ever treat her like inuyasha did. so i don't think that kiss really did any harm too anything. and the like he said in the last chapter "Thats why, as a wolf, he tried to never let people too close. Even Cheza had not been in his heart. He had cared for her, but he kept something of himself back. Kagome had not done that. And now it was tearing her apart." he held back some, but i don't think he could this time.
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Reviewed By: tinita [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2006 23:36 CST
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HMMMM, the only problem I have with your story or the writing of the story is the same thing the others pointed out and that is that Kiba and Kagome are comming together way too quickly. I feel the same as Fullmetal_Alchemist, Kiba was very emotionally attached to Cheza and Kagome to InuYasha so I don't think that it would be so easy for them to realize an attraction. I definately think that Kagome would push away from a kiss from anyone regardless of pain, exhaustion, or any other reason. I do , tho, see how they would be attracted to each other and think that it's very feasable that they could eventually get together, just not so quickly. The story is flowing well so far; I like the way you introduced Sesshomaru, it's good to go back to the IY part of this story, I'd like to see that develope further...I can't wait to read more.
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Title: Crits? Alright o.x;
Reviewed By: Fullmetal_Alchemist [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2006 15:22 CST
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Alright. Here are some Crits: Kagome and Kiba hit it off to quickly. Kiba would have still been a bit depressed about Cheza, ne? and Kagome would have tried to avoid this kind of thing for a little while longer, she just lost Inuyasha, member? And what about when (or if) she gets to Paradise and wishes for her Freiend's return? She would have to choose between Inuyasha or Kiba, and i soubt she could do that. ^^; Other than that, i absolutely loved this chapter, ne, this entire story! I am begging you to write the next chapter! Im dying to read it *dies*
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Reviewed By: Mrs cake On: March 05, 2006 22:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*Squeal* i loved it! he he Kiba is bein' a little kinky! woah never expected that but i love it! you rock! please update!!!! Mrs cake.
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Title: chap 3
Reviewed By: regretfully_yours_cassy_chan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2006 14:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story is very compelling, and i hope to read more of it soon. please update soon
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Title: Bold
Reviewed By: Angeleye21 On: February 24, 2006 15:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok I tell you what I think you do wrong ^^( Evil Grin ) I Think that you let Kiba fall in Love with Kagome to fast ^^Come on I Love Kagome/Kiba Fics but Cheza had just died and pop Kagome comes in the Picture and Kiba falls hat over heels for her in such a short time? Come now everybody ho knows the Anime knows that Kiba and Cheza had a very deebly bond and its inpossibly for Kiba to fall for kagome this fast ^^Its not that I don`t like that it gos fast ( I often can´t wait till the Kiss >.< ) but its an little unbelivabel ^^ so oh and I Love this Fic and hope you don´t let us wait to long till next Chapter^^ So keep up the good work and update soon
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Title: UPDATE SOON!!!
Reviewed By: moosegirl13 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2006 21:44 CST
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Hey. Awesome third chapter... I love the fluff. When will there be a lemon? I found a couple grammatical errors, but nothing really to worry about (I suck a grammar). I have a question: in the beginning of the chapter, that was the battle before Kagome met up with the WR gang? Anyhoo, I gave you a ten because I loved the chapter so much. Despite what you say, you're a very good writer already. Keep up the great work!
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Reviewed By: ShadowStar09 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2006 20:20 CST
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DUDE!!! This is a AWSUM! Story!!! I LOVE IT! XD I cant wait for the next chapter!!!
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Reviewed By: shashi1015 On: February 23, 2006 19:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story write more
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Reviewed By: tinita [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2006 00:38 CST
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Good so far...these are two of my favorite anime shows, great to read about the characters fussed together in one story!!!
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Reviewed By: Kurama'sFoxyMiko On: February 14, 2006 21:31 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it!!!!! Hope you update soon. Please, please do so soon...
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Reviewed By: bloodbunny [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 18:25 CST
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Please update soon! I want to know what happends next!
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Title: Update soon
Reviewed By: moosegirl13 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 16:18 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please (x's 100000) update soon. I love this story and want you to continue. You're doing an excellent job. Keep up the great work. I look forward to reading more. Thank you!
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