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| "Vicious gets vicious with Faye" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] | Title: yeah.....
Reviewed By: XxAbriannaxX On: July 09, 2005 20:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
Um.... yeah. That wasn't even a good sex scene. You should have built the scene up, and at least said something more tasteful then "The head sprayed jizz down her throat..." And why the hell did she have an orgasm when she sucked him? And I'm guessing that was your first lemon? If you've written more like that, god help us.
| Reviewed By: Isuzu Emi On: April 21, 2005 11:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, this was certainly original... but you've kinda missed the point of FanFiction: its not just about exposing you're own fantasies to the rest of us... Pretty graphic, a characature explanation of everything a 13 year old boy wants to do to Faye but never, ever, will. I really, genuinely hope these are not tried and tested tactics - not only illegal but just a bit *shudders*. The image of Vicious at the door with his "sword" was one of the funniest things i've ever, ever read - nice one. As a sidenote: I'm with "Stupid Sex Police" women don't ever moan in "orgasmic pleasure" when you cum in their mouths - you'll be lucky to get off with an "eew". This is not a "flame" just advice / commentary - people don't really want to read rape case headnotes, they want some build up, and some less comedy sex, if possible. EIx
| Title: LMAO!!!
Reviewed By: kiki ju chi On: March 12, 2005 00:07 CST
Comment/Review:
LOL! haha, that was VERY OOC and straight forward... but good none the less atleast. since i havent read ur info yet (and im too lazy to), im guessing this might be ur first lemon, lol! but som advice, u should ask some for beta-ing ur ficcy! ^_^ yes, i agree with the flamers a bit, but not in the insultish way. jus givin som advice! oh, if u havent watched cowboy bepop yet, then i think u should do so now. observe the characters a bit and then ull catch there persona! well, goodluck! ^_^
| Reviewed By: MwAhAhAhA On: July 27, 2004 01:32 CDT
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Damn...all those ppl are really mean! Like sum of the other pplz said, don't listen to those ppl, their hella mean! NewayZ, it was good! But, mayb u shoulda put a lil more to it ^.^ But, I still liked it!
| Reviewed By: shadowslayerprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2004 18:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I DON'T KNOW WHAT THE HELL EVERYONE'S COMPLAINING ABOUT, SURE IT WAS TOO FAST AND NEEDS SPACING, IT WAS STILL GOOD!SO WHY DON'T YOU KEEP ALL YOUR FU*****, INSULTING COMMENTS TO YOURSELF, IF THAT'S THE WAY SHE WANTS TO WRITE, THEN SO BE IT, WHO THE HELL DO YOU THINK YOU ARE TELLING HER WHAT TO DO! SHE'S THE AUTHOR!!!!!!!NOT!!!!YOU!!!!! By the way Kiku-chan the story's great...
| Reviewed By: inu_obsessed_chic27(nsi) On: March 11, 2004 18:14 CST
Comment/Review:
Awww, all da otha reviewers were so mean!!! I liked ur lemon. It get's straight to da point. Every1 else is just bein assholes. I personally have no idea about Cow-boy bebop but I like urs! I hope u will rite more lemons, dun listen to all da otha ppl who said ur fic was bad. I dunno wat ever1's prob is.
| Title: High-larious!
Reviewed By: The Stupid Sex Police. On: September 12, 2003 00:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is always screamingly hilarious to read sex scenes written by somebody who has never had sex before. Does Faye have a clitoris in her mouth, that allows her to orgasm when sucking off Vicious? My word. She's more special than anybody could have guessed.
Do yourself a favor and a) stop reading online porn, since it has as much to do with real sex as, say, My Little Pony has to do with thoroughbred race horses, and b) stop trying to write about things you so obviously, painfully know absolutely nothing about. | Reviewed By: Jenn On: February 02, 2003 19:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
well i don't know what y'all problems are, but this was a dang good fic i think. vicious and faye are the perfect pairing | Reviewed By: Cutiecherry [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2003 18:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay the story could have possibilities. You just went to fast into it you know what I mean. You should include more details like how she got there. This is very plotless. So keep on writing this is not a flame just improve it a bit and it'll be great okay bye bye.
~Tamiri-chan~ | Reviewed By: SomeAsshole [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2003 23:08 CST
Comment/Review:
worst lemon ive ever seen. and thats coming from me.
by the way, try hitting hte fucking "Enter" key. its really easy. |
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