| "embracing darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Title: Ho-hum
Reviewed By: rleroygordon On: July 12, 2010 20:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ho-hum, ho-hum, ho-hum. Another k-bash derivative fanfic. Keitaro's mind is wandering so he doesn't understand the material. Naru the hot-tempered nails him with a punch slamming him into a (non-existent) steel beam (read the manga and watch the anime--no steel beams anywhere in the Hinata dorm). He drops down from said beam smack into Naru's hooters.... I stopped reading there. Y'all GOTTA come up with something that isn't as derivative and boring as every other LH fanfic. It AIN'T funny!
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Reviewed By: coran On: August 21, 2006 11:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Comment/Review:
this fic was nice i like it so far you should name the blades yin and yang were kano has yen to make her more humain and keitaro has yang to make him more dark so that they balance eachother out but keitaro should have two swords the hina blade is the heirloom to him lol yeah but keep writing i like this story
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Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2006 16:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
Oh, yeah.... Ketaro's blade already has a name.... can't believe i forgot that little tidbit of info......hm..... =p read my fic if you want, i put a few names in there..... ask first please..... oh, and shadow master, are you competing with me for names?
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Reviewed By: Shadow master On: June 07, 2006 11:39 CDT
Comment/Review:
ironic blade names: keitaro's hina blade kenoko's love blade
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Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2006 21:00 CDT
Comment/Review:
Sword: Kuroshi ,school: Hashou no Kaisen, Keep this work alive..... I'll read and review it if you do.... and i if get anymore names for kanako's sword and such, i'll post em.... ok?
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Reviewed By: Shadow Master On: May 25, 2006 01:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
blade of destiny and sovereignty
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Reviewed By: Shadow Master On: April 05, 2006 11:13 CDT
Comment/Review:
please finish
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Reviewed By: Tury the Master of Mediocrity On: April 01, 2006 03:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have read the manga, but I have not watched the anime. So I don't know if Kanako is capable of picking him up. She looks pretty slender to me. I like this fic because it is the first of it's kind. I have never before seen a Keitaro/Kanako fic and am curious to know where it will go. I do have a few suggestions however. 1. Never be in a hurry, take your time writing things out. Even if you think it is takeing too long. 2. Gauge important fecisions. Keitaro looks at Kanako to be his actual little sister, deciding to be with her would take alot more time. 3. Authors notes sound better if they come after the chapter, that way you don't waste suprises. I would have really been shocked to hear his parents were killed. Lastly, I know what it is like to not get any fic-attention, so I am letting you know that I (and the guy who wrote the review beneath mine) really want you to write more. TuryScrema@gmail.com
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Reviewed By: arknine [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2006 23:31 CST
Comment/Review:
This fic is starting off with good background writing. If it continues in this way, good writing, I will definitely continue to read and enjoy.
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