Title: FFRG Review
Reviewed By: Pahhur [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2006 18:54 CST
Comment/Review:
Alright... It's defiantely odd. Probably a good piece of a story, but there would have to be events before and after to help it make sense. Otherwise there are a few typos, but nothing too incredibly bad. The discriptions are well done, however a lot of the action here is based on stuff the reader doesn't know. If you're going to do anything with this, flesh out the begining and tell the reader why these two are fighting.
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