| "Distorted Reality" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: bettychan On: April 19, 2006 22:35 CDT
Comment/Review:
This story is amazing. I, also, love the idea of mixing mythology and Inuyasha. This last chapter went far in explaining exactly what happened and caused Kagome to leave. It is a very well written story. Anybody can miss a few typos here and there. There are times when it is a bit confusing, but so was Dante's Inferno. Please update this story as soon as you can. And keep up the good work.
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Title: lizzie
Reviewed By: inugurl27 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2006 21:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i dont care wat anybody says bout ur ff its still gr8 and u need to up date soon!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Yuugi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2006 17:14 CST
Comment/Review:
First off, I want to say you have a very good idea in the works here, but it just needs to be brought out more to bring it to a greater reading potential. This story was extremely confusing, and I had to read it over a few times to get the concept of it. It felt as if I was missing something. You also have some very choppy sentences that would be better to be combined into other sentences so the story can flow more smoothly. You also need to take note of your punctuation. You have a lot of missing commas in both dialogue and narration, and you also need to start a new paragraph when a sentence of dialogue appears. You also need to run a spell-check on your story before posting as I found a few spelling errors in there (even though I knew what you meant). Also, when using Latin, this might not be a good idea as the whole story is written in English, but if you feel the need that you must use it, I suggest providing a translation at the end or beginning of the chapter as people who don't know Latin will probably have absolutely no idea what you are talking about (luckily for me, I take Latin, so I knew what the translation was anyway ^_^). However, as I said before, you have something good going on here, as I like the idea of mythology combined with Inuyasha. Thank you for submitting to the FFARG and I hope you continue to do so.
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Title: Distorted Reality
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2006 11:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Title: Distorted Reality
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2006 03:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 00:04 CST
Comment/Review:
Well, that was very interesting. Never did like Kikyo in the first place. Hmmm...makes me wonder where you're going with this now.
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