| "You Love Me?" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: Yamiace1321 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2006 23:41 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi! I'm new to the site, so I'm not quite sure how everything works, but I have been reading tendershipping fics for a while and this is one of the better ones, I must say! Nice change from the way too common Bakura beats Ryou and all that angsty stuff! Great Job!
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Reviewed By: Black Angel Reaper [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2006 10:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
Pretty good, I like it. I think Ryou and Bakura in a shower would be even hotter than them in a bathtub w/ Oreos and peanut butter ^_^. And knife-throwing is fun! Cya!
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Title: Love it!
Reviewed By: Nekosune! On: April 28, 2006 15:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Absolutely loved it! Yamyams, cookies, and pocky for you! I really can't wait for the next chapter, yamyams if you make it soon! ^_^
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Title: Intersting
Reviewed By: Servantian Knight On: April 25, 2006 00:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. It is interesting, I like it. Are you going to post up more chapters or is it done? Either way, it is good. I hope you write more!! =^.^= Hapy writing!!
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Title: COOKIES!!!
Reviewed By: Nekosune! On: April 09, 2006 01:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it! Cookies and pocky for you! ^_^ If you upate soon I'll give you yamyams!
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Title: Got my Ratings Wrong...
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: April 06, 2006 21:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gomen ^^'
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Title: Ake! XD
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: April 06, 2006 21:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Me like this last chappi lol. Thou thinking of Ryou's character I dont think he would give up his virginaty till much later, but a plot is a plot ^^ Theres just one mess up that I caught and its in this sentance where you ment to say Bakura but typed Ryou. "Ryou began to fumble with the buttons of Ryou's shirt. Eventually he got it open and smoothed his hands across the wide expanse of his yami's chest." :P Byother wise much wuv, looking foward to your next chapter XD
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Reviewed By: HER - Not Logged In On: April 01, 2006 17:34 CST
Comment/Review:
wow but was so wow! (*.*) MAKE HIM SAY HE LOVES HIM BACK PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: Developing Into A Writer..
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: March 26, 2006 09:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have a pritty decent plot and overall this has the potential to become a very good story, but it seems as thou your writtings still developing, that your still figuring things like point of view out. I do enjoy this story and I hope you continue writting and developing your skill! :)
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Reviewed By: Ryu-Inu [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2006 15:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Inu: I loved it!! You must write more!!!! *glomps you* Ryu: You have a very good writting style. This fic is very good. Please update as soon as you can. *bows* Inu: That means now!!!!!!!!! Ryu: *sighs and shakes head at Inu* *turns to you* Goodbye. Inu: This is going on my fav's!!! Byes~Byes!!!
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Reviewed By: DeathsDarkFlame [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2006 07:58 CST
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This could be a good story but there are a lot of technical problems. You need to work on your homophones. Your and you're have entirely different meanings. Also you need to work on your point of view and voice. You keep jumping around so I never tell who's talking, if we're in the past, present, or future, if the narrator's talking or if one of the characters is speaking. You also need to work on the character's voice. Have what they say be consisent. Overall, good chance to be a really great story, has a good basis, and good character depth, but you need work on the technical aspects.
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Reviewed By: tsutsuji [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2006 10:27 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I like this! Like it quite a lot, actually. For once, Yami has a clue when everyone else doesn't, which is nice. I like how you keep Bakura in character even though he cares for Ryou. Are you going to add more to this? You should definitely write more Bakura/Ryou, anyway!
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