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| "Wounderful Awakenings" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: t0k0 On: September 23, 2010 13:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
You had a good original concept and the general flow of the story was nice, but i have to point out several things: first off, grammar, yours was fairly far off the mark. second: consistency, for instance, robin's hair color of her nether regions. third: realism, when writing dialog, contrations (it's isn't, won't) are very common in spoken language. and fourth: Accuracy, if robin's 'plunging her fingers inside herself' she's already broken her hymen herself... other than that, it was a decent story.
| Reviewed By: LisaKC On: May 25, 2006 16:28 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful!
| Title: Wonderful Awakenings
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 20, 2006 15:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
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