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| "In The Hood" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] | Title: A friendly review
Reviewed By: RadioActiveRedhead [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2008 04:03 CDT
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I know you are done with this story, and I'm not going to lie but I really didn't enjoy it. I'm not saying you should quit writing but..like "elizabeth" I think it was...Basically she was saying, I think, "Use a little less lyrics and a little more typing." And I agree. I mean, yeah, lyrics are WAY fun but sometimes too much is just too much. Also, as long as you go "Playstation and 'blahblah' and 'blahblah' do not belong to me" in the beginning of every chapter you do not have to underline them. And the last thing that really gets my goat is that all your chapters are positively LITTERED with author's notes. Dude, seriously, if you got rid of the lyrics (except for maybe a little bit) and only put authors notes in the beginning or end of chapters, didn't write in bold, and only used italics when needed, and wrote a bit more for each chapter...you would be doing great! In my opinion I think you're using the lyrics as fillers. Wanna know why I think that? Cause I did it too. But after re-reading over my old stories I noticed that there was more lyrics than actual story! But you should seriously take my advice and Elizabeths...maybe a bit of advice from the others, check out some of the epic stories like from Rymsie or Sueric or hell, even A-Kay and Kagome357... Check them out and look how they do their layouts. It will help you. Fanfiction is fun, you shouldn't stop just because you "suck." If you "suck" then you should just find ways to improve. The brain is a brilliant thing, my friend. You can teach it to do whatever you desire. Utilize that power.
| Reviewed By: XxRuler_of_the_DarknessxX [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2007 20:11 CDT
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NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!! PLEASE CONTINUE!!! PLEASE!!!I LIKE THIS STORY!!! T-T
| Reviewed By: Inuyashas_girl_kagome2007 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2007 04:57 CDT
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plz countineu
| Reviewed By: Tohru Hotaru [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2006 14:45 CDT
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Heeeeeeeeeey! I like the story! Great ideas. Shove off other ppl! OH NOOOO! THIS STORY WAS WRITTEN A WHILE AGO! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! grrrrr... grar. grar? grar! wow! my new word. Grar. Lol, I luv the story. Dont stop a story unless you want to, even if ppl dont like it. There is nothing worse than an unfinished story :p lotsaluv, a crazy critique, Tohru Baker xxx O.o
| Title: iight...
Reviewed By: kyonkichi-luver [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2006 17:15 CDT
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Iight, let me say what I got to say. First of all, I think they are giving you a bit of a hard time. You write your fic the way you want to and don't worry if people insult it, but make a note at the end that anything that is written is not to be offensive. I like your fic, to me it's a bit original, how many fics do you see that are mixed in wit the hood like that. All you got to do is plan your plot the way you want it, and it's all gravy from there. Fanfiction is for fun, I had someone tell me that one of my fics was typical and I used too much internet slang. But I'll tell you what, I don't care. If people don't like the way you write, no one told them they had to read your fic. These are words of encouragement because I've been in your place. Keep writing, I bet your fic will be great. Dat's all I got ta say bout dat right thurr. kyonkichi-luver
| Title: Some Truth..
Reviewed By: sesshoumaru_kagura [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2006 12:47 CDT
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Hey, I know you're probably sick of me *laughs a little*, but I have to say you're fanfic may not be the best but I like it. I'm sure there are a couple of people out there who do like you story. I've gotten a few bad reviews before but I delete them and don't let them get me down. I believe that if there is no constructive critacism in a review it's not worth the light of day, much less your acknowledgement. Much like Kimiko's review, and you're right if someone doesn't like you're story they shouldn't read it plain and simple. I say if you are to get better keep writing, roll with with the punches (though some are uncalled for *cough* Kimiko*cough*), and only take the good reviews and the ones with CONSTRUCTIVE critacism into mind. So there you have it InuTasha123, that it my review. Though if you don't feel like continuing I understand. Keep writing and you'll get better^^
| Title: Words of encouragement
Reviewed By: inuyashafanaticllmv [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2006 17:08 CDT
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Hi!! I'm sorry that ur 1st story didn't do so well. I must admit after reading it well...it wasn't so good but that's ok. MY first story didn't turn out so well either. The thing is to keep trying and write something u know about more to start. My second fic is doing better although I am at a writers block and haven't updated and I still haven't fixed the 1st...oh sry I always get side tracked...hehe...neways so yah ur story was ok for ur first try although it wasn't ur best it was ok. Be proud of ur work because it is all ur own. Don't let what others say bring u down. Try another fic and if that one doesn't work keep trying. Don't listen to others this is a good learning expirience. It'll help u grow as a writer and artist. Keep trying. U might be surprised at how much u improve. ~inuyashafanaticllmv ~aka(Rikku-chan)
| Title: A Bad Review
Reviewed By: Kimiko [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2006 04:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Honey, your fanfic is a little on the bad side. Seriously, it's not the worst I've read, but it's sure one of the worst. It wouldn't matter if I was black, white, blue, purple, this fic would still reek something awful... to me. To me. And it's not JUST the fact that you were *attempting* to mix InuYasha with your version of "the hood". It's everything from setting up a simple paragraph to having an interesting storyline. Make sure you take a good couple of extra courses in Journalism before you go writing another fanfic. Period. Good day. --- P.S. If I could put 0 for any of the above ratings, believe me, I would.
| Title: Sorry?
Reviewed By: Elizabeth Hemingway [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2006 20:04 CDT
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Um, InuTasha, sorry if you are terribly attached to this fanfic, but I really think someone should tell you it's pretty much on a down hill route. I'm disturbed that I was offended by this and that I have to articulate the fact. I see this is supposed to be a comedy. I didn't find it funny. The humor is more generic that the average Inufic and the writing lever is hovering at par, which I suppose half makes up for that. But it's like a Godforsaken shopping list, each one of your chapters. And I don't care for you pimping all these nonlegit items that you percieve as giving your story a "hood" flavor. I understand that your trying to make this funny, but it's quite plain that you know next to nothing about the "real hood" just through reading these few chapters. You can't even parody it properly. Now that I've criticized you, I hope to tell you how you can fix some things, without suggesting you spend a year or two in New Haven or Detroit that is. You have a fairly good plot line. I like how you started with the mornings, which you kind of tell in parallel, and I do like the meeting somewhat. But I really don't feel it, your telling of the events is rather bland, like poorly steeped tea. It has, I'm sure, something to do with the tag along items you litter throughout the chapters. It's just so generic it leaves a bad taste in my mouth. Really take the time to plan out a story, give it that umph, give your characters a flare that you can develop in them, make it original and your own. Sit down and brainstorm and make notes! Basic stuff. Visualize your story and let the ideas flow. I suppose I like the one on one game at the end. You could do more with that. Just weed the genericness (?) out of your stories...you have some decent writing to salvage in there. Honestly, no one cares if you've seen 8 mile a few times or if you can copy/paste rap songs of a website. Just write, and make it good. You wouldn't be writing half of this if you didn't love it, so I encourage you to pursue better habits. Thanks for your time, EHB
| Title: ceep going
Reviewed By: Annierayaz [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2006 21:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
update soon i love it
| Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2006 14:14 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great fanfic. please update SOON!!!
| Title: tight
Reviewed By: Animelover14 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2006 20:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i think your fanfic is so tight!!! off the heazy 4 seazy lol!!! no really i think your fanfic is tight, waiting for more, peace out!!!
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