Reviewed By: Susan On: March 02, 2002 07:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes, yes please write chap 2:Bra. Here, let me help you to your desk (^_^). I really loved this one. You took a passionate moment and described it in such a way that I was damn jealous and found myself sighing (I really do need to get a life). Can't wait to see what juiciness you come up with, but here's a suggestion: for Bra's conception how about dressing up the bedroom with candles, flowers, lavender insense, soft music (take your pick), it could be raining outside (that's always romantic) or it could be a hot and sultry summer's night. They could be sipping on a little wine and you can have Veggie press Bulma up against the ceiling and they can start there caressing and kissing, etc., and eventually work their way down to that special piece of furniture. Whatever you decide to do I'm sure I'll need a cold shower afterwards (^_~). Pls update this one asap. Later. |
