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| "Beauty Within Darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] | Reviewed By: desideria [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2010 20:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update again I really like this story
| Reviewed By: Kalico again On: August 17, 2006 23:20 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is gettin' better and better. i find this fic quite entertaining. keep it up and update soon plz.
| Title: After thought
Reviewed By: Shut_Down_Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2006 14:25 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, I just realized that you've read my story too lol
| Title: Good Job
Reviewed By: Shut_Down_Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2006 14:24 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, I like this story, good plot ^_^ Hope you continue it soon
| Title: Nice job and on a side note
Reviewed By: MewMew2 On: July 25, 2006 03:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice job oh and I don't blame ya, reviews are needed to boost author moral, especialy if (like me) you're a student with a job, cause that's 2 lives on it's own. Y knkow? And on a side note, unless it's spanish or french (some of those characters that arn't in the St. Charles english alphabet don't show up) chances are that your language won't show up and they will replace it with crap. Keep this in mind for future refrence, I suggest that you put what it would sound like in english with english letters if you can. Anyways, nice and I shall return to review once more.
| Reviewed By: bunny453 On: May 22, 2006 17:10 CDT
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UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: paniwi (NLI) On: April 16, 2006 10:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's an ok story, but I'm not too fond of the hand kissing thing. A boy does not kiss a girls hand, that's not really tradition I believe. Also, they seem to be gay, every last one of them. I see a lot of fics like that and to tell the truth it annoys me a bit. there are not THAT many gay people around and you'd expect the ones that do to be confused or at least give it a good deal of thought. To make your story more realistic I would advise you not to make them all gay, and yes, I know there will be 50.000 fangirls growling at me for this. Secondly, Ryou's characterization. Sorry to say so, but he is as OOC as they get. He is harsh, rude and has this fuck-off-everybody attitude. THese are trades I associate with Bakura (who is ironically enough very polite and friendly) not with Ryou. You should also try to put some more explanation in your story. Sometimes I loose track. I'd be more interested in this attack or whatever from when Bakura was 6, then to know what Ryou, Malik and Yugi were wearing on the night of the feast. Try to avoid this too: 'chocolate eyes of an angel' As much as I understand you mean that Ryou's eyes had the color of chocolate, it is gramatically incorrect. To my tastes Ryou gave in to Bakura's charms a bit too easily. please do not take my review as a flame, I"m just trying to help, and overall I like the idea behind the story.
| Reviewed By: Saiyamaru-nsi On: April 14, 2006 22:46 CDT
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Go Ryou! Heh. Doing good, but I still don't get how the Hikari's can not know that the Yami's are, for the most part, just trying to get into their pants. I mean, they can't have survived that long with out knowing how males(and Vamps) like the Yami's think. Anywho, more kick-ass Hikari action! You should have had Ryou casterate Keith. Can't wait for the next update.
| Reviewed By: Saiyamaru-nsi On: April 05, 2006 22:10 CDT
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You need to work on this fic. It's starting to lose it's origionality, though Sassy Ryou is Always good. It also feels kind of rushed. Don't choose quanity over quality (that doesn't mean you can take forever to update though...) Spend a little more time on the fic, and you'll be back in business. Keep trying.
| Reviewed By: Hasi On: March 23, 2006 15:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your fanfic, it gives Ryou, normally a char which is left in the background of things a spotlight and a whole new spin on his personality. I look forward to reading what you write next.
| Reviewed By: Nice! On: March 02, 2006 04:37 CST
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That was grea! good job! please continue!
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