| "Right in front of you" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Title: this story owns.
Reviewed By: fishesrcool69 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2007 22:33 CDT
Comment/Review:
This story kicks ass! when are you going to update? it's been a month :[ the story is sooooo good and i am so eager to see what happens next!
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Reviewed By: ScifiAmy [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2007 23:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chapter was wonderful. Excellent writing ability. However you still need to work on your spelling. I could not rip my eyes of the page. The story is coming along very well. I'm hoping the next chapter is going to get HOT! It sure looks that way. I am sitting on the edge of my seat awaiting the next chapter. Please don't wait too long along to update. UPDATE SOON!! I'm holding my breath....
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Title: So far so good
Reviewed By: ScifiAmy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2007 00:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Story is good so far. Quite a few spelling errors (college), are instead of (our), chapter 1 - heart was (breaking - not braking) also, you use italics for their thoughts, but sometimes you don't. You need to be more consistant. You've also left off the s at the end of many words. Try reading each word to make sure it sounds okay. You might want to use MS Word and do a spell check. It might help. I feel you've got the personalities very good. Keep it up. Looking forward to what Kagome has in store for Inuyasha.
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Reviewed By: Charmander [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2007 00:28 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I do like the plot, I look forward in seeing more. keep up the good work
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Reviewed By: slim9636 On: February 17, 2007 23:44 CST
Comment/Review:
You have a good plot so far but I wish you would tell me who's talking. It gets really confusing sometimes. more discriptions would help too. You might want to re read your chapters before you post. So far so good keep posting
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