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| "Dragon Knights Sentai" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: Good job!
Reviewed By: Sirona_Argante [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2007 02:25 CDT
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This is one of the best Dragon Knights fanfics that I've ever read! Your ideas were unique and interesting, and I should be doing homework instead of reading this. ^_^; Keep up the excellent work!
| Title: FFRG Chapter 8
Reviewed By: Rini Saiyan-jin [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2007 10:50 CST
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The first scene in this chapter is well written and I like how the characters interacted with each other. The situation and the characterization is very realisitc. "Happy Ruwalk song while the pushed the button for the lift, Just pointing out the 'while he pushed,' I'm sure that was overlooked when you included the t in the. In the next scene, I really enjoyed the buildup of tension and blew out when Rath said he was going to change his job and break away from his father's shadow. And then the phone at the end of the scene really added a punch to the whole climax. I'm also enjoying how the people are trying to figure how to go on with the show with Rath's leaving. In the next part, though, I don't like how too many of the first speaking lines started in ellipsis. It didn't feel natural. As for the rest of the story, I liked the interaction between Runway and the screenwriter, trying to figure out how to write a story with Rath being gone and the ending, perfect 'hanger' for the chapter. Nice writing.
| Title: FFARG Prologue Review
Reviewed By: Shinashi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2006 21:17 CDT
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I honestly like how the prologue really felt like an introduction. It seemed as if I was meeting these characters for the first time...Well.. It is my first time... Sorry if I'm inexperienced with the series..But you gave solidified characterizations of the people and I truly admire that. I saw very, very few errors. The way you described the people here made up for the lack of description of the background. I'd advise some more evidence of where they are at, unless that was a point for mysteriousness, then I apologize. You have the personalities on point, girl! Keep it up! Again.. sorry for the inexperience... They could be OOC for all I know! :D
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