| "Witness" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: 118-sethshadow On: July 14, 2006 18:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't really find this too entertaining. I mean come on; only about 6 chapters and Kira easily forgives Lacus after he was so mad before. The lemons are decent, but considering the rating, you should add more. And just my opinion, but I think you should lengthen the chapters much more; each one you have is very short. Well anyway, I don't want you to stop, but just improve.
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Reviewed By: ***lakusu yamato ** On: July 07, 2006 12:34 CDT
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What the hell?? You made Lacus out of character! Why would she need to cheat on Kira with another guy? I know it's your story and you tried to make it interesting, but still. =/ I like the lemon, but it needs to be more sexy. If you can catch my drift. xD
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Reviewed By: cyberzero On: June 29, 2006 02:31 CDT
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you might want to change the rating for this story. That lemon should make this X rated but you only have it at Y. I'm confused and angry about the whole Lacus affair thing. Would you please explain that to us a little better because that is NOT something Lacus would do.
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Reviewed By: cm On: June 29, 2006 02:27 CDT
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Would you mind telling us why the hell Lacus cheated on kira for the guy who got her into this mess? I say that he forced her to in order to get close enough to get the money he needed. That she didn't have a choice in the first place. Of course this is only speculation but I HAVE TO KNOW!
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Reviewed By: ZGMF X-19A Infinite Justice [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2006 18:29 CDT
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this is a pretty good story so far :)
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Reviewed By: Krispy On: June 03, 2006 01:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
haha! my cousin! writing a gs fanfic. makes me laugh! haha anyways, good work! but... the lacus cheating thing.. thats kinda weird.... so yeah... good job though! 2 thumbs up! =D
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Reviewed By: cm On: May 26, 2006 16:42 CDT
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you made Lacus's character completely wrong. She would never just cheat on Kira like that! I say you make it so that she was forced to do that! is this K/L or something else?
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Reviewed By: guglanformatinan On: March 29, 2006 20:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
evil lacus how could she do that to Kira! GRR!
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Reviewed By: Dragonkiller [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2006 18:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is a cool fic.keep up the good work update soon and can u make the chapters a little longer please
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