Title: Getting there...
Reviewed By: Raven_Akira [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2006 22:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was really good! But it would be a lot better if you worked on how the poem is set out and your grammar. I couldn't fully get the poem, it was sad and it hinted at someone hurting you, but it didn't really describe 'who' was hurting you and 'why'. See with a poem, it is obviously written to express our feelings or to describe things, but you have to do it in a way where both you and the readers understand it. You get me? Making it vague is great, but being 'too' vague makes the reader confused, like it made me admittedly...lol. But, keep trying, you have a lot of potential and if you ever neeed help, just give me a buzz, ok? Akira.
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