| "A New Evil" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: Kaitlin On: June 14, 2007 08:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't wait 4 chapter 2!!!!! Write another one soon!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Kaitlin On: June 14, 2007 08:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't wait 4 chapter 2!!!!! Write another one soon!!!!!
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Title: a mew evil
Reviewed By: de_flying_cheese_curd_of_tokyo On: November 26, 2006 15:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an intresting story. I like how you made Renai not as ditzy and perky as the other mew(Mew Berry) who goes into the cafe and is injected in a sequence simmilar to the one you used in this story. you show great promise as an author. i cannot wait for the next chapter to be put up! i like how you have made Renai a little bit insane. She reminded me of one of my friends who woul do just that sort of thing if she were injected as a mew mew. Also i am wondering, if you said one of the animals that Renai is injected with was a type of bird, then why does he not have birdlike wings, like those of Mew Minto? does she have a power-up form in which sprouts wings? and i want to know ... is she any relation to Masaya Ayoma? (your discription of her seems a bit simmilar to Deep Blue; as in they both have straight black hair, pale skin, blue eyes, ect.)PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!
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Title: Nice!
Reviewed By: MewMarliz [MediaMiner Member] On: September 10, 2006 06:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was cool!you have gat to write more!
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Reviewed By: Emmy-chan On: July 20, 2006 18:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woooow...this is a very good fanfic!!! keep typing,or you'll be in pain like those jocks that were harassing Renai!!! (you:o.O) lol
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Reviewed By: Ryou_rox On: June 22, 2006 14:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was really great, but how could you have not read A La Mode and come up with almost the same story line as it? Lol, I love how your character kept calling Ryou 'Blondie'.
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Reviewed By: toasterwoman360 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2006 01:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice fic so far.
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Title: A Mew Evil
Reviewed By: Cypher DS On: March 26, 2006 09:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting use of the first person narrative to allow Renai to defend her otherwise insane tendencies: breaking and entering, bursts of violence (she -wants- to break Ryou's nose!), and an extreme narcissism (can't stop talking about how superior and beautiful she is compared to her old schoolmates). For all the talk of her own self-greatness, Renai is rather fickle, willing to drop her inhibitions in a flash and tackle-glomp hottie Ryou. It's a neat look at how people justify their behavior. Your writing style is developing, and you give Renai a noteworthy description of personality through action. One stumbling part in my read was her discovery of the Cafe; we're never given any architectural description that would tell us why the building is so cute.
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