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| "Good Enough" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Toxic On: May 25, 2006 23:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed it a lot. I believe if it was a bit longer(as in more chapters), then people would be more excited about the content in the second chapter. You know, like giving them samples before the whole desert. ^.~
| Reviewed By: fujinakaheero (NOt signed in) On: March 18, 2006 15:42 CST
Comment/Review:
umm.. wow? Um, I suggest you go over your stories before putting them on here, I mean it's alright to have mistakes but, more than half your story makes no sense, you also didn't build up a plot line, stories are just coversations between people, you gotta put detail and depth into the story to develop the plot, both of which you didn't do. You didn't explain how Sasuke came to like Naruto and everyone is way out of character, you should put a warning that your characters are OOC (Out of character) so people won't expect everyone to be in character. You've got a good idea for this story but the plot to it is poorly developed and all of the spelling and grammar problems 'cause misunderstandings for the reader. I suggest you either get BETA or go over your story and try and develop it better before posting it on here.
| Reviewed By: me On: March 17, 2006 20:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You should really go into more depth, and make sure what you think is what you write. If you need some one to beta for you, I will. My e-mail is fireprincess59@yahoo.com, if you feel like e-mailing me your chapters.
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