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| "Lucky 13" Reviews/Comments [ 20 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Title: Yes, Josh, we all love it
Reviewed By: Watch 4 Stars On: July 03, 2006 11:58 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ya gotta luv the fluff! lol He missed her... Heck of an excuse, that. lol And why wouldn't Cream believe it? Well... Okay, so it is a pretty fantastic tale, but still. It would explain Sable not remebering anything, and all that. What's really cool about this story, besides the fluffy fluff, is that one knows that Sable and Cream don't work out because of the prologue, but one can't help but hope for them! One can't help but forget the prologue ever existed and concentrate on the story, and the fluffy fluff, and one reads it through. That's annoying... But so genius... kk, luv you and this story! BYEZ! ~_^
| Title: I return!
Reviewed By: Tails11 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2006 16:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey YiffyOne! Sorry I haven't reviewed this story in a while, meant to do it, but life, being life, got in the way. So, as I did before, I'll review each of the chapters I haven't reviewed yet. 3: Well, you certainly described the cat well, very haunting aura about it from the start. And the bell sounded like something from a really good horror movie, meaning it was extra creepy. Lady Luck would have a grudge against him for not believing in luck, the entire chapter made complete sense, right down to the "Curiosity killed the cat" bit! 4: Depressing start, but then I guess I'd be depressed too if that had happened to me like that. Someone kicked you! Shows what jerks the world has sometimes. If anything, it's a good thing Cream found you, I mean, she IS one of the happiest and friendliest of the gang. What she did for you and how she acted was EXACTLY the sort of thing Cream would do. I'm incredibly impressed. Oh, nice name pick by the way. 5: It's interesting how you made the distinction between Sable and Josh, I liked it. I'm also very impressed with just how sneaky Cream is with her Step-dad. It took me till about half-way through, but I finally figured out it was. Detective friends, alligator - I should've got it right then, but somehow I missed it - It's Vector! 13, the number seems to haunt you now, as old Lady Luck would happen to have it. And it's been, if Cream was age 6, which I think she was, 12 years! Oh, one last thing before I move on: wonderful way to end the chapter. 6: A hug! What else would Cream do if someone complimented her like that? Shame the gang separated like they did. Very life-like. Cream really seems to have a hold on quite a few talents, drawing and cooking to name a few. If I had to hazard a guess about what it felt like to, essentially, disappear and wonder what my friends and family were thinking, I probably wouldn't feel that great either. As Josh's mother said, "You don't know what you've got til' it's gone." Also, once again, nice way to end the chapter. So! Now that life isn't in the way, as much, I'll be able to keep track of the story better, and keep my reviews on a regular basis. One more thing that just occurred to me: Sable is a black cat, a symbol of bad luck, and the shirt he wears has the number 13 on it, whereas Cream has two rabbit feet, which should cancel the bad luck being presented there. Keep it up, and continue the story as soon as you can! (If you get this review several times, my apologies, the silly thing is giving me problems.)
| Title: ch 5, yes I double-checked
Reviewed By: Watch for Stars again On: July 01, 2006 15:02 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*snickers* Sable/You called her pretty. That's so cute! Crap, I still haven't gotten those dvd's copied for my mom... *rolls eyes* That's right, I read this before I did what Mom told me to do. Feel the love! lol Vector's her stepdad. that's so kewl! You've aged Cream a whole lot in this story... 12 years...Whoa...
| Title: chap 4
Reviewed By: Watch 4 Stars On: July 01, 2006 14:46 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm stupid, the last review was for ch 3, not 4...This one's for ch 4! lol Yes, I am gonna review all 3 chaps seperately! Cream named you Sable. That's a clever idea. And there's always hope for a broken thing. Always.
| Title: ch 4
Reviewed By: Watch 4 Stars On: July 01, 2006 14:29 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh wow, Josh...Wow. Reading that actually hurt me... You really are one hell of an author... Lady Luck kinda reminded me of Amy...lol
| Title: A Sonic Tale!
Reviewed By: Darkringer's Guest mode! On: May 15, 2006 14:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Beautiful pieces of writing thus far! I was a tiny bit upset with the first chapter lacking any linkage to the characters. But, that's not to say I didn't like it. On the contrary, despite the said lacking, the story-line and amusement factor of your story is far too big to be listed in a rating! At least a rating on these scales anyway.... take no notice of these '10' values, this story is worth more than that! Keep up the good work mate! I look forward to your next installment! Oh, and never mind the username, I'm just too lazy to log-on!
| Reviewed By: Tails11 On: April 24, 2006 18:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, Im reviweing both of your chapters here, so this will hopefully be longer than one of my normal reviews. Chapter 2- ...Interesting start. I have to say, I was not expectating that, but it was good never-the-less. I know the kind of teacher you're talkign about, they're pretty darn annoying. I like Star and Amy, very good. Wonderful work. Chapter 3- I gotta say, this is definately some of your BEST work I have seen. I think was worded slightly off, but you know what i mean, i hope. Anyway the but the mom was good and the IMing bit was fantastic. I noticed as I was writing this review that two of the writing styles looked familiar to the ones in your chapter. Thats not a bad thing mind you, i like it. However, the last chunk of writing... if I could write like... that was incredible. It was really like what a child would think or talk like. It was, and i don't say this lightly in the least, glorious. Truly and absolutely perfect. The robot was the toy, Sonic the ball, it was like you were seeing everything through your younger eyes. Incredible, simply incredible. The whole black cat thing looks like it just MIGHT be important. Maybe. (I'm being sarcastic here, obviously. If its not obvious, do tell me so i can work on it.) Now, as i ususally, if not always, say at the end of my reviews... Update as soon as you can!
| Reviewed By: Watch For Stars BE-YOTCH! On: April 24, 2006 08:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LMFAO I love you, I really do, but...WHY'D YA HAVE TO MAKE ALL THOSE SHORT JOKES! I will kill you... Painfully... Brutally... I will DESTROY you... Don't think I won't... Plus, I'M NOT SWEET! >.< Jerk-off... I have a reputation, ya know! Anywayz... LOVED the chapter! As per normal, right? lol Man, the 4-year-old POV was so CUTE! You know the high little squeaky toy voice lil kids ALWAYS seem to have? Yeah, that's what was in my head while I read this! Man, I love having a sub in my computer class...Like right now! ~_^ OH YEAH! Breakin' the rules! WOOT! I thought it was really cute how you had yourself call Eggman's machine a "toy." lol "Cute" is obviously my word of the day... Oh well... Sonic is the best blue hedgie EVER! LOOOOVE HIM! And Tails tossed a "glowing yellow thing." lol For slow people, that was a RING. You know? Those lil things that you hafta collect in the games? Any of this ringin' a bell? No? Wow... You're stupid... lol See? I'm MEAN! Get that through your head Joshua! MEAN LIL BITCH! GRRR! Anywayz, Updates must occur with the utmost haste, ya got it? Don't care WHAT it is, as long as it's soon! MUST....READ...MORE... *dies of impatience* lol See? Amy's not the only impatient one outta this group! lol Okay, UPDATE! Luv ya, Josh! Byez! ~_^ P.S. Oh yeah! You know you like this review! lmao I am so very bored...
| Title: OMFG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: LUV SHADOW 14* On: April 23, 2006 18:29 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! THIS IS, LIKE, THE COOLEST STORY EVER! AND, I SOUNDED LIKE A FRIGGIN' PREP THERE... DIE PREPS... ANYWAYS... LOL I THINK THIS IS THE BEST CHAPTER SO FAR... MY FAVORITE PART, HAS TO BE WHEN YOU DO THE 4 YEAR OLD FLASH BACK... IT'S SO CUTE! YOU KNOW THE SMALL, KINDA WHINEY VOICE THAT KIDS HAVE? WELL, I HAD THAT VOICE IN MY HEAD THE WHOLE TIME I WAS READING THAT PART. IT WAS SO COOL! LOL I ALSO LIKED THE TIE IN WITH SONIC AND EGGMAN, WHICH WOULD BE THE 4 YEAR OLD FLASH BACK PART, BUT STILL, I LIKED IT A LOT! LOL YEAH, THIS IS A MASTERPIECE, AND DON'T SAY IT'S NOT, CAUSE YOU KNOW IT IS... AND I KNOW IT IS... AND STAR KNOWS IT IS... AND ANYONE ELSE WHOSE READ IT BETTER KNOW IT IS... OK, I'M DONE MAKING IDLE THREATS... TIME TO MAKE SOME PROMISES... LOL THIS STORY IS GREAT AND FUN TO READ... IT'S GOT LOTS OF SURPRISES AND STUFF IN IT... LIKE THE BLACK CATS... I REALLY LIKE THE CATS... EVEN THOUGH I'M A DOG PERSON MYSELF, CATS ARE... HMM... TOLERABLE, TO SAY THE LEAST... BUT, ANYWAYS, THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST (MAYBE EVEN THE BEST) STORIES THAT I'VE EVER READ! THIS TRULY IS A WORK OF ART! ~LUV SHADOW 14~ ;)
| Title: good god
Reviewed By: Luv Shadow 14* On: April 13, 2006 22:36 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LMAO! I LOVE THIS STORY! HEY, WHAT'D I TELL YOU? I HIT HARDER THAN STAR! AND... YOU MIGHT WANNA INCORPORATE THAT... LOL YEAH... NOW I'M THE ONE RAMBLING ON... MAN... I'M SO BORED... AND YET SO AWAKE... HOW COME YOU HAVEN'T IMed ME YET? SLOWNESS... OH WELL... GUESS I'LL HAVE TO BE THE ONE TO "DO THE HONERS" AS THEY SAY... LOL GREAT STORY BY THE WAY! LOVE IT! ~LUV SHADOW 14~ ;)
| Reviewed By: Wat For Stars* On: April 13, 2006 17:12 CDT
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Hey! Cliffhangars! ARGH! I may enjoy leaving cliffhangars, but I don't enjoy being subject to one! You are mean! But you DID update all 3 of your stories in one day... So I suppose I'll allow you to live! ...for now... jkjk ...Or am I? You never know!Hey, gamehead1777, READ CHAPTER 2! >.< lol But okay, yeah. Much love to ya! I'm sure you're tired of my writing that...Oh wait..It's YOU! lol You'll never tire of recieving love... Anywayz...I'M IN THE STORY! WOOT-AGAIN-AGAIN! That's right, hoes! I'M IN DA STORRRAY! MUAHAHAHAHAHA! Yep, I IS STAR! lmao Luv Shadow 14, who needs to READ THIS!!!!!!, is Amy! lol I'm in a story! I'm in a story! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I win, y'all lose! Damn... More people gotta read this! And REVIEW! It's so good! Okay, so that was a major UNDERstatement! But I'm doing other things... Excuses...should only be noticed if they're true! And that one is! lol Too...many...friends! GAK! *dies*
| Title: if you can tell me
Reviewed By: gamehead1777 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2006 17:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i realy did not get the story can you please tell tell whats it realy about. i mean read your disription but it said some thing about cream the rabbit when read the story i did not see anything about cream the rabbit
| Title: Wow
Reviewed By: Tails11 On: March 28, 2006 16:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
An excellant beggining, I must say. I'm very curious as to what Josh did to annoy Lady Luck. I also like your talking about L.L. as a real person. It makes the story more interesting. I am anxious to read your next chapter!
| Reviewed By: Watch 4 Stars On: March 23, 2006 08:31 CST
Comment/Review:
*jaw drop* Holy cow, Josh! So far, you've managed to capture yourself wonderfully! *crickets* Heh... ^_^;; Yeah, it was a bad joke... DEAL WITH IT! I'm guessing that her step-dad is good 'ol Vector, huh? I may be wrong, but *points finger in the air for dramatic effect* I HAVE THE AMAZING POWER OF GUESSTIMATION! lol Yeah, I'm special. We all know this, yes? Hmm...It dislpeleases me that Amy's the only one who's reviewed so far... *shrugs* You'll convince people somehow, Josh. We may just put this IN Reality Check, and I mean IN it! lol Give Cream the shock of her life, eh? And a good reason for Tails to hate you! lol jk But we could do it... 0.o Rambling? Meh, I guess I am. ^_^; Oh well, you do the same, as you wrote in the story. Yes, that was my clever little way to turn the point of this review bac to your story, Lucky 13, which is brilliant so far, as are all of your writings. ~_^ It was a lil confusing, but that's just because it's the prologue. Some of the stuff you wrote leaves one guessing, so you'd better update! If I'm going to use my *points finger in the air for dramatic effect* AMAZING POWERS OF GUESSTIMATION! I need something to see if I'm correct in my assumptions or not. I've just realized that so far this reviews either stupid or intelligent... *shrugs* I'm wierd like that, as you very well know. I'm also being eaten up with curiosity. After your review on A Single Mistake, and after reading your e-mail, which did creep me out a lil bit, I'm intrigued and curious. ^_^;; I'm gonna stop now before I confuse you and myself any longer.... UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ...Please?
| Title: LOL
Reviewed By: Luv Shadow 14* On: March 23, 2006 07:54 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ALL 10'S! YAYZ! LOL SORRY... I CAN'T HELP BUT LAUGH... I MUST BE IN A GOOD MOOD TO BE LAUGHING AT THIS EARLY IN THE MORNING... OF COURSE, IT'S ONLY 9:00... OH WELL... LOL BUT HEY, THIS IS A GOOD STORY SO FAR... FIRST I THOUGHT YOU WERE TALKING ABOUT ONE OF THE SONIC CHARACTERS TIL I GOT TO THE PART IT SAID YOUR NAME! o.O; LOL BUT IT'S STILL GOOD! YAYZ! SEX... LOL SORRY... OH WELL... LOL GOOD STORY SO FAR! CAN'T WAIT FOR "MORE"... LOL BYES! ~lUV SHADOW 14~ ;)
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