Reviewed By: Oriya-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2006 09:01 CST
Comment/Review:
You did a good job in hooking me as a reader in your introduction. Your OC making te transition from the demon world to the human one for reasons that are unclear to us. However, I was a little concerned about your lack of discription on your OC's guide. She has seen him, and you would think that she would notice how he looks and how he dresses. When someone is walking down the street and you see them, don't you look at everything about them? From what they're wearing to what they look like? I would expect it to be the same for a character in a story. I was also hoping that we would get more information on the OC and her people. Do they look mostly human? Hence the fact that she went into the Human world with no glamour or anything. (That's how you wrote it.) And how are they 'people of the earth'? I thought it was weird how they lived, like humans. Payement to a man for marrying a woman. A child sleeping by the fire. I would like to know why her people are so human like. From what I have seen in the anime, the demons don't live by those rules. But that is my interpretation of demons screaming and yelling for bloodshed. Ja!
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