| "No Money" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] |
Reviewed By: Tohma On: June 09, 2007 19:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like the story, i hope u continue it, though i see it hasn't been updated in a year. if you want someone to edit it, i could. just let me know. PoppGirl@nycap.rr.com
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Reviewed By: BCF On: May 16, 2007 20:17 CDT
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please update. i like the story line so far. if u need help, go to www.fanfiction.net/~BecomingNumbForever and message me. i'll do my best to help you. you shouldn't give up on this story
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Title: No Money
Reviewed By: Arcanas [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2007 07:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this pairing. Please continue and let your loyal readers/reviewers know the rest of the story; let Atobe and Fuji be happy with each other. I think they can help each other: Atobe can teach Fuji how to grow some backbone, and Fuji can teach Atobe something about feelings like charity or even love.HNPV
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Reviewed By: tct On: February 22, 2007 22:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update.It would make me very happy.
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Title: Need help?
Reviewed By: Kiri-chan On: November 27, 2006 06:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the idea. However, you need to brush up on your writing style and your grammar. You asked if anyone could help you in beta-ing it right? I would be more than happy to help. e-mail is hokori_wa_taberu@yahoo.com Great job, please keep up the good work! (-.-) and please update soon yeah? *smiles*
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Reviewed By: Hilda On: June 08, 2006 12:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
well. first of all. I hate the way Fuji talks. second of all. Syusuke is his first name, I don't think his parents would be calling him Fuji. third. I liked it, I like the idea but I really think you need someone to check your stories before you post them because there's a lot of these weird mistakes, like there was 'vegetarians' when it should've been 'vegetables', and 'were' when it should've been 'where'. I could read them for you and edit them if you want to, my e-mail is Eleanor_9_0@hotmail.com
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Reviewed By: blah9797091797 On: June 04, 2006 20:25 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
continue...? pleeasse?
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Reviewed By: SeaMythie On: May 18, 2006 21:26 CDT
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Reviewed By: Arenja-too-lazy-to-log-in On: May 14, 2006 19:50 CDT
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"He grabbed the knife on the table and started to cut the vegetarians." I used to be a vegetarian. the word you're looking for is "Vegetables". Same with "Fuji hided his face deeper under his hair while he kept working with the vegetarian". And this story almost made me cry (that's GREAT! I haven't cried in 3 years, and I'm getting close! YES! I HATE being called, "No-emotion-girl"). And I can edit for you. my E-mail is Zeldagirl93@msn.com okay?
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Reviewed By: yvy On: April 12, 2006 18:58 CDT
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i love fuji, please update soon
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Reviewed By: Ficfan3484 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2006 14:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Fuji, I feel so sorry for him.
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