| "Trancending Death" Reviews/Comments [ 31 ] |
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Title: OH! Wait!
Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2006 14:28 CST
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ok. i had another guess but i'll just wait until you drop the shoe (so to speak...).
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Title: "I will not return"
Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2006 14:19 CST
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i just want to say before i go to the next chapter... that was kinda sad. i mean, i know he's fustraited but he's gotta have faith. his mom said he needed to. anywho, on to the next chapter. oh, and i believe the big bad alex has to face is himself. lets see if i'f right... ^_^
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Title: omg
Reviewed By: Esperati Nero [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2006 21:26 CST
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The battle scenes are getting sooo much better! Your descriptions are improving ^^ *glompsh*
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Title: kyu!
Reviewed By: Esperati Nero [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2006 10:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Er... I tried to grade easy on you! Um... I'd say your last book was much better! There just wasn't enough of a happy-sad contrast. You have to have variety to keep a reader going! You fail to use correct punctuation for inquiries ^^;;; and there are occasional typos and mix up of characters... (You called Celine 'Cecilia' in her first appearance in your other book-- the 4 lords -- too!) The creativity and originality, I'd say it's pretty good. If you used any ideas from other people (yu-gi-oh, for instance) I didn't see much of it besides the tomb... ^^;;; Your descriptive abilities have improved as well! Bravo! As for the final battle... I'd have to say Scion is the devil, or Scion has something to DO with the devil. I don't really understand much of it... just... just please! WRITE IT ALREADY! >_< I'm waiting desperately over here!
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Title: whoa...
Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2006 16:21 CDT
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it's like FMA and Yugi all rolled into this neat demon wrapped package... i like! so... how is lucia (sp?) going to bring back brit and the kid? i mean, he can't use his life. he's already dead. shadow and aurora can't. kiba's already dead. and this tome... is it really THAT powerful? tough luck on the kid's soul. that was really sad. just a thought though... is there any way to purify someone's soul? would that help both alex and the kid? could the tome do that? bringing back the kid purified and stronger than alex would be so kick ass! anywho, kudos on the latest chapters.
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Title: ahem...
Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2006 16:37 CDT
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ok. this is what happened... i started to go to school. that's why i haven't updated my story. as for the traveler's chronicals... that's been put on hold, AGAIN! so, about your story... you have no idea how many times i've wanted to set fire to my computer. you wanted drama... you've GOT IT! man, this is too much of a rollacoaster! please, for the sake of my heart, keep alex and brittney together for the rest of the story. and if they part, let it be for short moments. oh, and i know i didn't mention this before but do you have a beta? ya know, someone to read the story before you post? don't as me to do it. i may be able to help with the formatting but not spelling. i totally bite on that. just a thought. other than that... it's great. keep up the good work! i'll review as much as i can... but don't hold your breath. ^_^
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Title: "stone giants"
Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2006 15:52 CDT
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keep it in jap. don't mess with a good thing.
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Title: "decent into darkness"
Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2006 14:51 CDT
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just to answer your question before i go onto the other chapters... yes. ^_~
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Title: cruel but amazing
Reviewed By: SomeKindOfGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2006 13:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like the pace but who is this person controlling alex? i hate how this last chapter ended because he's going to kill more innocent people for a girl that can't even remember him. i sure hope this story will do a quick turn around to something better because this isn't good atall. great job on your writing though. you kept me at the edge of my seat the whole time. keep up the good work. SomeKindOfGirl
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Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2006 11:39 CDT
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AAAACCCCKKKK! This is getting tense! I'm going to re-read the chapters just to make sure I'm not missing anything. Those Elders are a little messed up if you ask me. Poor Brittney and Alex. They're being used like pawns. *subject change* You're not a geek. Well... You're not alone anyways. Geeks unite! ^_~ Kudos!
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Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2006 08:35 CDT
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Just read part 4. I'm glad they went down fighting. It would have been really sad otherwise. As for the X-Men... I have to agree. I'm guessing you've read the comics and seen the cartoons. *sighs* We know too much to know that they've totally changed the X-men univers to fit their needs... *steps off soap box* Sorry. Great chapter. I'm off to read the others.
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Title: it continues
Reviewed By: SomeKindOfGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2006 12:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i had no idea that Lucia was interfering.but who is the person that is controlling alex with the image of brittany?does she remember anything yet?the story goes on!!!
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Title: amazing but sad
Reviewed By: SomeKindOfGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2006 07:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i like how it started but i'm a little sad that you had to kill the two after they did absolutely nothing to Alex but hey, the story is still awsome. shara
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Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2006 16:37 CDT
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Good fight scene. I'm shocked that Baou and Risa (sp?) are doing so good. Kinda glad though. Wouldn't want Alex going all dark just yet. I'd love to see how you are going to weave the Yugi-o idea into your story. I've only seen a few episodes myself but can see how it would inspire you. Also, if you need an ear to vent, I'm available. Kudos and *hugs*. ^_^
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Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2006 16:28 CDT
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Sorry about your friend. That's a hard thing to get over. So you really don't need to appologize. I've been in a car crash myself and haven't updated any of my stuff either. Take your time... although I see another chapter. Going to read it now. I want to know if Alex really jumps off the deep end or regains his senses.
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