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Title: Okay
Reviewed By: SomeKindOfGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2006 21:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You did a fantastic job with this story. I am starting to feel the emotion come alive again. I am sorry to hear about your friend and I hope that everyone is ok. I like how you ended the story. It's a good way to keep people coming bacl for more but just don't have me waiting for too long. Shara A.K.A. SomeKindOfGirl
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Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2006 20:08 CDT
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Wow... Things are getting really tense. I have a funny feeling I know who Lucia is. But I'm going to have to wait and see if I'm right. As to who's controlling Alex... Well... Again I'll have to wait. Pitty that Riza and Baou (sp?) are going to be toast by the end of all this. With Alex's anger flaring the way it is, they have a really slim chance of surviving this. Kudos. Oh, and don't worry about the updates. My muse has me working on a totally different story and I don't know when I'll get back to it. *smiles sheepishly and waves goodbye*
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Reviewed By: SomeKindOfGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2006 09:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
your writing is god but you have quite a few spelling errors. the plot is good and you follow your characters very well. I'm the type of person that can feel the story if you know what i mean. what you should do is try to explain alex's emotions a little better. I know that you are an internet author and your stories are good but put a little more feeling into it. In the beginning i could feel it but now it's like you are slacking. You are a wonderful writer and I hope that you continue to write. SomeKindOfGirl
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Title: Dun Dun Duh...
Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2006 20:29 CDT
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And the plot thickens! Oh, my. Lucia (sp?) is really... mysterious. And I think he's fallin for Brittney. I wonder if once Brittney does realize just what Alex is doing, will she go to Lucia? Oh, what did he see when he touched Brittney? Curious minds want to know. Kudos! I hope to have my next chapter up soon.
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Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2006 19:00 CDT
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I don't mind confusion. It's what keeps the reader at the edge of their seat. ^_^ I'll wade through it just like anyone else who's been reading. Now... about that aura control thing... If Alex is controling some of the most talented demons around, then he'll have a mini army of his own! These aura controled demons will be able to carry out his orders and collect him more souls! Oh, I hope I'm not reading too far into this. Brittney's right. If he keeps this up, there will be nothing left of the demon world for her to return to. But how are they going to stop him? Alex's like... unstoppable! Kiba and crew are gonna have it rough from here on out... Oh! I almost forgot about the baby! So many issues. So little time. This is a wonderful web you weave. As always, kudos. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. ^_^
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Title: hello
Reviewed By: destiny dreamer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2006 12:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really need to read more. I'm so behind and as a friend I should be more supportive. Sorry I don't keep up when I should, you just put up chapters so fast!!! I guess I should do the same huh? I know that you are waiting for my new chapters in my stories but this isn't about me. HaHa!!! Can you believe in only a few short days Mike will be here??? Are we still on for that movie date? I really do want to go and I miss you a lot. I can't wait to see you again, Alex. I would have wrote you a comment on myspace, but I can't do that at school. SHHH! The teacher may find out I am typing something other than work. You know me! I can stay out of trouble before too long or I'll get bored. I still can't believe how much Brittany (story girl) is like me. You're so good with that kind of stuff. By the way, I was wondering if you wanted some of my poems. I can e-mail them to you. I found some I wrote in the past and I thought you might want to read them. I had better go because this is becoming more of an e-mail than a "great story, keep up the good work" thing. I really do miss you, Alex. And I can't wait until this summer to see you. Call me sometime...unless you don't want to. I'll understand. Lots of Love, Tenshi!!!
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Title: ?
Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2006 18:23 CDT
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So... Brittney is real... and you're Alex? Kinda interesting. Doesn't change anything. I really like the story. So, when are you going to let the cat out the bag, so to speak? That is about Lucia's part in all this? I REALLY want to know what's he up to. He's backing up Alex but why? Oh, and let's not forget Kiba and them. What are they going to do now that they know what Alex is doing... or should I say now that they know HOW he's doing it? Either way, I'm putting my money on Kiba and crew trying to stop Alex from getting his souls. Naw... Not money. Just some lent balls that I own. ^_~ Anywho, kudos!
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Title: hwy
Reviewed By: destiny dreamer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2006 13:56 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's odd to read reviews from people who read your story. I was reading one and when it mentioned my name, I thought it was really talking about me. I still remember the day you called me to tell me you were writing a story with me and you as the main characters. I remember how get it was that we could still be friends after the break up and yet your story was still as wonderful as ever. I'm proud of you, Alex. I really am. You're a great person and one day you will make a girl very happy.
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Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2006 21:03 CDT
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&^%()&%^& my internet! It's been down for like EVER! *rolls eyes* Glad it's back up now. Oh, I totally thought Brittney would have gone off on Alex once he told her what he was doing. But doing all this to bring her alive just to end up loosing her is too much! How is Alex going to get around this? And that blonde guy that reminds Brittney of Alex... What's he got up his sleeve? Is he going to help or be all Mister Mysterious and just watch? Great fight scenes, by the way. Very descriptive and yet not too much gore. *thumbs up* Kudos! You have me at the edge of my seat as always! ^_^!
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Reviewed By: GG48 On: May 04, 2006 18:36 CDT
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Really I don't mind the talking parts. They help move the story along. Though, the fight scene was great! If Alex uses demon souls to bring back Brittney, would that do something to her? Just a though... Oh and don't worry about not posting properly. *puts on paper bag and stands up* Hello, my name is greengal48 and I don't post at regular intervals. Kudos! Feel free to post when you can. Ya know I'll be reading!
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Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2006 20:41 CDT
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*scratches head* sorry! i've been WAY busy. Anywho, what does Raza have up his sleeve? is this just a ploy to kill Alex or perhaps steal Brittney for some evil plan? don't know, but what ever it is, it's bound to be good. i totally have faith in you. just one thing though... what about the child? i know Alex hasn't forgotten about the kid... right? i mean, sure! bringing back Brittney is important but what about the kid? i'd still like to know if it's Alex's or Zanatos'. and if it's Alex's kid, why did it have to parish? shouldn't it have had some of Alex's powers too? *sigh* i know... too many questions. i'll wait patiently for the rest of the story.
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Reviewed By: that greengal48 chick... On: April 25, 2006 20:46 CDT
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don't feel bad. i've just sent off my next chapter for Being Human to my beta and it's been FOREVER since i've updated. so, you're in good company. anywho, i like what you've done. although it's killin' me to see alex go through all this, i can understand the torment. kudos and take as long as you need to update. i'll be reading no matter what. ^_^
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Reviewed By: inuyasha-lover [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2006 10:20 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
dang this story is intence please continue it soon i rilly want to read more soon
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Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2006 19:39 CDT
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So, now he'll risk his soul... his humantiy to bring back Brittney. Yup... She's gonna be pissed when she finds out just what happened. I'm suprised that the others don't try to take him down or bind him with magic or something! Oh... and what about the kid? I know it died and all but if it's Alex's kid, then it should be part necromancer... right? So, it could have lived and no one realize it... Just a thought. Kudos! I'll be tuneing in to see how your story progresses.
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Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2006 20:39 CDT
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*raises hand* Um... alchemy? And how about saying that Alex has SNAPPED! I don't mind waiting a few chapters for Brittney to return... just don't do what happend to Ed and Al from FMA. I don't think Brittney would be able to deal with half of an Alex or just his spirit. I am curious as to how you will play this out.
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