| "Fallen Blade" Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] |
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Reviewed By: bairdie On: May 14, 2011 08:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
a very well written and original take. obviously a very dark piece of fiction, one that i can only see being at least as difficult for you to write as it is to read; but non the less i think it is a shame that you havent continued it; it would have been interesting to see how you played out the rest of the story, and whether there is any light at the end of the tunnel for keitaro and all of the cast. |
Title: Update....
Reviewed By: MaceEcam On: November 05, 2009 22:32 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update soon.
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Reviewed By: Sicksorrow On: June 24, 2008 05:59 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's An Excellent Story!!! I would say this is a must read but I have to ask...WHEN ARE YOU GONNA UPDATE!!??
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Reviewed By: Killerman83ca On: October 27, 2007 16:23 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have read your story and I was in tears in some parts of it. Please don't make her kill herself. I want to know if she and Keitaro get thought it. Please let Motoko understand what had happen between them. I for one like to know what is going to happen becasue I like how you left us hanging on the story. Please don't kill her off. When Motoko and Tsuruko please let them talk during a fight because that way Motoko can get her back for it. I know this is long and I would like to know what happens. Please update soon.
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Reviewed By: Vilkath [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2007 02:32 EDT
Comment/Review:
hmm pretty intersting first chapter, sadly disapointing second chapter. You did just about all in your power to make it Dark, but really lacked the logic behind it. All the characters pretty much turned OOC, and no solutions of any kind were really found. Something bad as this happens I do not see the house carring on like nothing happend. Either the girls come to consol and help Keitaro, leave the house in anger, keitaro leaves in guilt etc. Plus Kitsune up to her old tricks of getting drunk? If what happend to Keitaro because of alchol doesn't make her want to sober up and get it out of the Dorm, nothing will. I really expected at least Motoko and Keitaro to get some their feelings out after this incident. Even if it was I could of loved you but I can't now sort of deal. Sadly we get nothing. Even a strangely understanding Su would of been a nice touch, she would sort of understand Keitaro being forced into adult hood.
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Reviewed By: BLaDeFuRy On: May 03, 2007 06:11 EDT
Comment/Review:
interesting story... can't wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: sveta89 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2007 15:33 EDT
Comment/Review:
ahh! she's going to kill herself ... damn great chapter can't wait for more
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Title: Well...Dizam
Reviewed By: TuryScrema On: April 17, 2007 05:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm glad you could get away from the Manga this chapter. Now that you arn't in that 'mode' your real skill is shining through. I am impressed, and thankfull. I had honestly thought this story was dead. Not that I'm a stranger to being proven wrong; but it does feel good from time to time when it's like this. Can't wait for more. ;P
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Reviewed By: sunako On: April 16, 2007 13:51 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i don't think he took his idea from 'ship in the nights',cause hawker748 did say he's the one who've taken simmyc idea..although i must say he did a pretty good job with it..i love ship in the night..actually i mostly love his LH works,(haven't read his eva fic cause i haven't watch those yet)he's the best LH author in my opinion regarding the kei/aoyamas pairing,but i think seeing as i read this fic now i have also come to love your style of writing,i would love a continuation for this one,and i really appreciate it..besides although you have the same idea but the story does differ and i would love to know how you're side of story unfold,please i anticipate your update..
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Title: wow
Reviewed By: kidloco [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2007 20:52 EDT
Comment/Review:
that was cool and yes need back in full metla evangelio, i want know more of them in that universe and what the usseles roy do there too lol
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Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2007 14:11 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice Dark story you got here. Gripping drama and emotion to keep you hooked. but I don't see hide or hair of Naru here, just a line or two. You'd figure she'd react either at Keitaro or a Tsuruko. So that has to be addressed in the next chapter and whether Tsuruko's alive or for that matter keitaro's all up to the author! dennisud
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Reviewed By: Zero Asakura [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2007 00:25 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
hi this fic is really good BTW i did read the fic from the other one kind of like this (Ships in the Night) well i want you to update this one this fic is really worth it and... i want Tsuruko to go the hard way with Keitaro, fully taking him under her control... hahaha well good luck
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Title: Hey!
Reviewed By: Nysk [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2006 08:00 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hope you will continue this story as it was very enjoyable and I would like to read more!
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Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2006 17:20 EDT
Comment/Review:
Update......... I like this fic....... I'll keep R&R'n if you update......
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Title: Well.... dang
Reviewed By: Tury the Master of Mediacrity On: May 03, 2006 13:36 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This probably wouldn't have been as long if you hadn't transferred so much of the Manga into the story, albeit the possibility does exsist that a non-Love Hina fan will find this. That said, I know you say you took the idea from "Ships in the Night" but for some reason this feels as original to me as any other fic. I would like to know what Anue means and where you got it from. And never in the history of fanfiction reading have I been distracted so many times. It took me 2 days of on-off reading to get through it. And now I insert the obligatory "Update, Plz..." and I shall bid you good day.
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