| "In Your Haori" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: Lamb On: May 09, 2006 22:46 CDT
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It's an good idea, but you seriousley need to beta it. one thing you could start with is paragraphing.
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Title: Um
Reviewed By: Charmander [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2006 02:10 CDT
Comment/Review:
When your not here, I sleep in your t-shirt. I wish you were here, to take off your t-shirt. Ok I had a hard time reading the fic because of the spacing. if you would fix it, I could give you a better review. I only read six lines and got kind of frustrated. I have bad eyes. but the premise is kind of cool.
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Title: Um
Reviewed By: Charmander [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2006 02:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
When your not here, I sleep in your t-shirt. I wish you were here, to take off your t-shirt. Ok I had a hard time reading the fic because of the spacing. if you would fix it, I could give you a better review. I only read six lines and got kind of frustrated. I have bad eyes. but the premise is kind of cool.
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Reviewed By: skullz On: May 04, 2006 15:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
that was so gay...
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Reviewed By: Angel_of_Elements [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2006 17:46 CDT
Comment/Review:
Aw, that was kinda sad that she just dreamt it. But it was another great story.
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Reviewed By: Kawaii Bell [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2006 14:33 CDT
Comment/Review:
is there a sequel? but a great story.
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