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| "Could you love me?" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2008 03:03 CDT
Comment/Review:
i just found this story and i like it alot, i hope you write more soon.
| Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2006 10:35 CST
Comment/Review:
Very interesting. I like the plot twists (Rin, Shigure) and the plot itself. It's cute, though it does seem a bit rushed. The grammar/spelling/etc/ mistakes were there, but almost dismissable. Since indenting doesn't seem to work on this site, you should double-space betweeen paragraphs to break up the story a bit. It's kind of hard to read when it looks like one big mesh (even though it isn't). Long paragraphs are nice, but not when they're all long. Separate paragraphs when a new idea comes along. Btw, this is just constructive criticism for you to use or not. You don't have to, but as a reader/fellow author, I understand from both points of view. I love the story nonetheless. Keep up the great story! Happy writings from a fellow author! ~Tori-chan~
| Reviewed By: Black-Meteora [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2006 20:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was actually quite interesting; I love all the emotions portrayed, along with Shigure's betrayal. I like how comfortable Yuki and Kyo are together now, though things might be moving a bit too quickly. There was a lot of spelling errors, however, and its all one block of text, so it would be easier to read if you put an extra line between new paragraphs. I really hope that they dance again and that there is a lemon!
| Reviewed By: Yummyness On: May 14, 2006 04:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
OMG!!! I love it!!! GRR RIGHT MORE!!!!!!! it so cute n.n
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