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| "The Butterfly Heart" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: Mediocre
Reviewed By: Psychlone [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2006 22:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story is mediocre at best, definitely originial though. I do have to say your spelling and grammar needs to be reveiwed first before posting. Also, your descriptions lack complete and total visuals. Finally don't put the author's note in the middle, if they have a key differance in appearance, the city and the forest, put it IN the DESCRIPTION. One more thing...minus points because I hate people switching from Japanese to english or vice-cersa...if it is written in english, please try to keep it in english. Other than that it was enjoying to read, fun even. I am not trying to be mean, just trying to help.
| Title: Chapter Two
Reviewed By: Arenja [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2006 12:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A few spelling mistakes in the second chapter but still interesting all the same! You really took some charm into the King of Bandits and made him ACTUALLY NERVOUSE! He's not usually nervouse, even on the inside. You really gave him a more human look, I like it. Keep up the good work!
| Title: Wow
Reviewed By: Arenja [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2006 13:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THAT'S THE BEST STORY I'VE READ ALL DAY! Great plot, keep it up! I wanna know what happens next, I'm on a total cliffhanger here! You put me at the edge of my seat the whole time, and I didn't know what would happen next. It was completly random, but in a very good way that it kept me reading!
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