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| "To Hell and Back and Back Again" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: Chaos_Jaguar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2008 18:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey so far I love this fic to death...and that picture you described would completely made me squee. Although to be honest I usual go squee when it comes to Sephiroth, don't ask I just do. I really wish games would let us play the bad guys, they're so very sadistic. Anyways as I said earlier I love this fic and hopefully I will continue to love it to death. Seeing as it has hit all my happy buttons I probably will have a lot of fun reading the rest. Bye for now!
| Reviewed By: Kacey On: September 29, 2006 01:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hey, so i think the whole rating thing is kinda stupid, so I'll just tell ya what I think in the review box ^_^ And I think it was good! Interesting concept for a crossover. Makes me wonder where this is all going--you've intrigued me! A word of cation, though. Although adding in Japanese words and phrases may give the dialogue a little more flavor and authenticity, not everyone enjoys having to scroll down to find out the meaning of a sentence if they're only halfway through the story. Know what I mean? It can become a little annoying. I would say the same for your use of Egyptian, but since you mostly only use place names and titles, it's a little different. But I dunno, that's just what I've been told before as a writer myself. If no one has complained about it, then I wouldn't change anything *wink* Oh, and if I remember correctly, "where am I?" is "Ore wa doko desu ka?" (literally, I am where?) But I don't use "ore" much--me being a girl and all ^___^
| Title: YAYZ!!!!
Reviewed By: Arie_of_The_Dragons [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2006 16:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(Arie comes into building to find Atem and Cloud there.) Arie:Ah! So I see you met Atem have you Cloud? Cloud:Yes...Why? Arie:Just wondering. Cloud:Yeah right Arie:DO YOU DARE TO DEPHI ME!?!? Cloud:Um...Yes! Arie:YOU WILL BE TAUGHT A LESION!!!!!! Cloud:AHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!! Arie:*Tackles Cloud*Cloud! you are no match for...ME!!!MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! Cloud:...Um Ooookay. Atem:... Arie:What? Do I have something on my face??? Atem:*Wispers to Cloud*Is this the girl you told me to watch out for? Cloud:*Wispers back to Atem*Yes! She is more deadly than you think! She clobbered Sephiroth, in one foul swoop! Stay away from her!!! Arie:And just WHAT are you two wispering about?!?! It isn't very polite you know! Cloud:AHHHHH!!!!!!!! RUN AWAY!!!!*Runs out of building screaming bloody murder* Atem and Arie:O_o;;; Arie: I don't know him! Atem: Neither do I! Arie: OOOOOOOO! LOOK!!! Cloud left his Buster sword!!!*Gets evil idea* Atem: Um Arie are you ok? Arie:*Grabs Buster Sword and Smiles evily* Atem:Um...Arie what are you doing??? Arie:Nothing!*Walks over to Atem* Atem:Are you sure??? Arie:Of-corse I sure.*Drops Buster Sword and tackles Atem* MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!! Atem:Hay! What are you doing!?!? NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!! Arie:MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAA!!!! I GOT YOU KNOW!!!!!!*Starts tickling Atem to death* Atem:*Dies from laghter!* Arie: Well any wayz awsome story! PLZ WRITE MORE!!!!
| Reviewed By: chaosrising On: June 30, 2006 12:33 CDT
Comment/Review:
i like your story. i think the japanese is great. you should continue this story. i love the crossover that you did.
| Reviewed By: seto lover On: May 24, 2006 11:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's good so far i really like it, but u could lower down on the japanese a little, not that i have trouble understanding since i know japanese myself. i hope that u post the next chaps soon, plus i can't wait for more vincent =^-^=
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