Reviewed By: star_struck [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2007 20:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Honey, I am sorry, it is a really good idea and stuff, but you really need to work on your english skills in it, maybe use a word processer or something? You grammar and spelling leave much to be desired, making it hard to follow the story. You need to find a way to distinguish between who is talking, whether they are talking, doing something, or talking. You need to find a way to connect your thoughts better, and need more punctuation. Other than that, it is a really good story, but you really should use a word processor, like say, microsoft word. That should help immensely. Good luck, and keep trying!
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