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| "Never Enough" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: jc On: May 29, 2006 05:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This really touched me although it is not an uncommon sess/kag plot (where sesshoumaru hurts Kagome to hide the real issue). I agree with emeraldonil in that you should write an alternate plot ending :) I dont think it really went down the tolit, there was clear diction and emotion. Best wishes :)
| Reviewed By: emeraldoni1 On: May 25, 2006 20:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
okay, will you write at least one happy ending? please? angst is fine, but when it all clears up (without broken pple and the loss of glue tp fix them; and maybe some love and tender kisses that show how deep a bond can go) there could be some strong quality between the couple (sessy and kagome) instead of suicide or death of the spirit. i still love it though, i really do. im just a happy ending type of person ^^. By the way, in your other series 'the pain of llosing another' what jhappened to sessy and kagomes family. did they know where she was? anyway, great job, love you stuff, blah blah blah... your probably so annoyed with me, usually i dont review so much... oh well^^ oh yeah, if sessy really lost a loved one, i dont think he would contemplate their death. that word sorta instills a senses of serentiy an calm. i imiagine that he would be in torment, full of guilt and regret. his self preservation instinct might even fade away. maybe he would become reckless. i dont think he would sit down and think about his loved ones death. other than though, it was a great angst. you said it wasnt, but i disagree. so, great job. yeah, heh heh heh. ill shut up now ^^
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