| "All's Fair In War and Love" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Daxemon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2007 05:44 CST
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Thank you for finally wrapping this up. The last love making scene was immense and intense, I actually felt a flutter in my chest among other places I will not mention. I had to actually pause in my reading at times to get my bearings. WHOA!!! I loved the epilogue. Nice simple wrap up. MERRY CHRISTMAS AND A HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: bluesnake40 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2006 03:07 CDT
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This is great and can't wait to read the next chapt(s) and see if Ryo does finally cave in. Can't believe that no one has written this plot line yet but even if they had, your's is really v. nicely done. I can sense Dee's frustration & anguish. Thanks for sharing and looking forward to reading more great of your stories.
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Reviewed By: UltraEra On: May 27, 2006 15:56 CDT
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You've got a good fic going on here, easy to read and interesting subject matter. However, you might want to tone down the language a little. I understand that when people argue, there's some cussing going on but in Chapter 1A you used the word fuck 33 times, and that's a little extreme, and it's very OOC for Ryo as well. I'm mentionng it because it really really distracts from the story. Other than that, it's fantastic.
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Reviewed By: fullmetalguitar [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2006 22:04 CDT
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It's about time someone addressed the issue of lube! *lol* I really like this, Dee's showing a deeper side to him, and that seems to be a tad rare sometimes. Ryo's a little... more PMS-ing than is really fully IC, but I suppose after what happened he's pissed. I'll be happily awaiting the next chapter. ^_^
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Reviewed By: Is O Eirinn Me [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2006 03:25 CDT
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I like it, i really liked it. I cant wait to see what Ryo plans to do. I like seeing Dee cutting Ryo off and not the other way around. Update soon!!!!!!!
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