| "Between love and the sword" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Title: Was... Is... Will?
Reviewed By: Mischevious Megan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2006 21:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hey one thing I noticed about your fic is that you tend to write in past tense a great majority of the time. If you don't know what that means it's when you write about what already has happened instead of whats is happening now. This style of writing seems to make sentences short and choppy. Like running smoothly then smacking into a pole. Try making sentences more like 'Kaoru IS going' than to 'Kaoru went' and your story will improve greatly.
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Title: Me Frist!!
Reviewed By: KissMe4BadLuck [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2006 20:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'M THE FIRST TO REVEIW!! Who0o0o0o0o0o!! It makes me all warm and fuzzy ::cuddles self:: Hehe^^. I must say, you've caught my interest! Update again soon!! Ja ne! ~Kissy kiss~
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Title: Me Frist!!
Reviewed By: KissMe4BadLuck [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2006 20:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'M THE FIRST TO REVEIW!! Who0o0o0o0o0o!! It makes me all warm and fuzzy ::cuddles self:: Hehe^^. I must say, you've caught my interest! Update again soon!! Ja ne! ~Kissy kiss~
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