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| "The Pursuit of Power" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] | Reviewed By: pollygator [MediaMiner Member] On: November 01, 2006 01:07 CST
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This is a great fic! I really hope you finish it :D I'm a bigger Ranma fan than Inuyasha, though I do have some passing Inuyasha knowledge, and I didn't have much trouble with the characters so I want to let you know you're doing a great job with it. I hope to see more Akane/Inuyasha interaction! They both seem to be in the same boat :D GO YOU!!
| Title: FFARG- Ch. 1
Reviewed By: Shinashi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2006 19:06 CDT
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A really nice story! Unfortunately, this type of story would only appeal to certain types of readers, but the transition in this fic is fluid, an enjoyable read. I like the in-character talk of Shampoo- it doesn't sound incessant at all or annoying, which often happens when I read of a character who speaks of oneself in third-person. I do find Kagome's love for Inuyasha to be a bit unreaslitic, unless the fic is situated near the end of Inuyasha. Other than that, I don't believe that Kagome is so in love with him as of yet. Also the overuse of wench is prohibited. You should replace them with woman or girl more often. I would also like to point out that after adverbs directly in the beginning of the sentence, and transitions at the beginning of a sentence, there should be commas. And between two independent clauses, there should be a semicolon. There are sentences and phrases like this one: "before gracefully leaping out the charging swordsman" that need more information. Hope you do well on your story in the future and that you submit more to FFARG!
| Title: Chapter 5?
Reviewed By: Aurora 18 On: July 06, 2006 00:44 CDT
Comment/Review:
Where's chapter 5? It was good until then, the only thing on the chapter page was the disclaimer.
| Title: Chapter 5?
Reviewed By: Aurora 18 On: July 05, 2006 23:29 CDT
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Where's chapter 5? It was good until then, the only thing on the chapter page was the disclaimer.
| Reviewed By: perpetualdarkness [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2006 21:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really enjoyed it. i hope u continue writing asap. i missed chapter 5 but found it on ff.net a little late >_
| Reviewed By: Rabid Badger On: June 25, 2006 18:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is really good. I like it. Please write more. THere was only a minor problem in it. Ryouga asks Shampoo what she's doing in Tokyo, when Nekohanten was in Nerima. This is pretty weird, since Nerima is a ward of Tokyo (one of the 23 central wards, infact). Then again, Ryouga probably wouldn't know... Anyway, a great read, and a plus for it being RaAk.
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