Reviewed By: staindgrey [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2006 12:29 CDT
Comment/Review:
Heh, this was made for the summer contest, wasn't it? It was exceptionally written; I can tell you have a very wide range of vocabulary at your disposal, not to mention a great personal knowledge of the setting you're writing about. Not many authors can do that on fanfiction sites. As for how interesting it was... Well, I couldn't get into it. For a letter format, it was very well done, but it still lacks substance and leaves the reader uncompelled. But the only gramatical error I could find anywhere in the writing was in the fourth paragraph: "...revel in the knowledge that the four of us will come together in world of living..." where you forgot "the" before "world". But that's all, and it's a very minor detail. You're a very proficient writer, and I wonder how many heads you could turn if you wrote a full story instead of a letter.
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