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| "Naruto VS the Kyubi" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: dragoon-tyjet [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2007 21:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved the storyline. Its great to see that there are some really good fanfic writes out there. I'm pretty new to the idea so mines a trail run. I really enjoyed your work and i especially liked the part where you linked Naruto to his Father Yodamine. Great work can't wait for the next part of this story.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2006 18:09 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hmmm, not bad, true to the design of Kyuubi and Naruto, as well as Jeraiya, though you do need to redo the spacing on the sentences, they're a tad confusing, as its hard at times to tell one sentence from another. Also, you're writing style needs work, more descrition, show what is happeniong, don't tell it. It will mean more work, but it will be more satisfying to reread, for you and anyone else who reads your work. Otherwise, quite good, the concept is interesting, keep going, and don't forget to do rewrites.
| Title: ummm
Reviewed By: Loneshadowdemon [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2006 14:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
the story was great but what was up with all the A's.it made the story confusing.
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