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| "The Incident" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: nice
Reviewed By: Lkat On: July 21, 2006 03:58 CDT
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fun stuff... you know... i actually liked it i mean it was pretty good. very poetic kind of but who is this friend and what is his purpose.. does he give any furhtur significance to the story?? is this it? are there no more updates?? if there are then you should definitly expand because i still am left wanting to know who these people are and what they are doing. Maybe a father who beats on him or neglects him because they are rich (big house). a mother who is a cuckold (cheater) maybe he is abusive towards women, who knows but i do know that you should expand on the character development. who is this girl. what is her family like. does she have a name? does he have a name? maybe her father was abusive. maybe shes an orphan.;;; what's their school like? how old are they? why was he going into the bathroom in the first place? these are quetions to be left unanswered. anywho. i hope you update ths story i look forward to reading and reviewing your next installment -Lkat
| Reviewed By: angel of mint On: June 23, 2006 20:25 CDT
Comment/Review:
and then he says "i think we need to talk....about getting you fixed..." T_T how sad would that be? hah!
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